rate_review Reviews

I like the general idea of this story, but I have to admit that I had to stop after this chapter because there are just to many grammar mistakes and some of the words really need to be checked. I suggest you do a spell check on your chapters of this story because the idea is good and your attention to detail is nice. But the grammatical issues just made me unable to read this story.

Oh, come on! Please update! Please update! Please update! i want to know what happens next!

Where is chapter 8???

I think that everyone might be too perfect, as in, they have that "sixth sense," and that they all act so stereotypically. The whore acts totally THE WHORE, the most powerful man acts totally THE ABSOLUTELY MOST POWERFUL MAN IN THE UNIVERSE, and NO ONE CAN GET PAST HIM, and top-notch assassins NEVER MAKE MISTAKES. I think the level of arrogance in your story should be lowered a notch, actually. A true hero/heroin in a story is someone who is weak in some way, but works hard and finds a way to overcome it. Personally, I think that having everyone so perfect makes it seem like a jaded Jackie Chan Kung-Fu movie.

dear sosoru,

i can only imagine how frustrating it can be when a gifted and talented author writes a wonderful and exciting work of art then nobody recognizes the achievement. i can only say that i have noticed the trend at affn that most readers don't review, an egregious error on their parts, one that in no way reflects on you as an artist or on your amazing stories. i for one would be overjoyed if you would consider completing this and your other captivating stories.

healthy incentive to update... i am not above bribery >=P

::chocolate coma::
12 oz silken tofu
12 oz melted chocolate chips
whipped to a fluffy froth
refrigerate till cold ~yummy!

please, please (nor am i above begging)

thank you,
ginny

wow, i love this story! I too want to hear how Paloma explains this too. please update... whenever... ^_^

Yay I found this fic again! I lost track of it for a while when I changed computers, but found it because you updated Devil Wears a Pinstiped Suit and remembered that was another of your stories. I'm sad you haven't updated again, I hope the muse is still interested. I'd really like to see where this is going. I keep expection an argument to break out over who exactly gets to kill Shishio once the two find out their both assasians. They'd of course each want to be personally responcible for the kill and I can see them quietly being in just the right place to foul each other up.

as i was reading this story i was struck by the images, personalities, and emotions that your words painted. i enjoy the interactions of the characters, i especially enjoy the 'bad' kenshin and kaoru and how you have described them.

this is a really suspensful and gripping tale... and i'm in suspense now... waiting for your update. as kaoru is left clinging to the side of that building, i am left clinging to the period at the end of the last chapter. won't you please update... i don't know how long we can hold on!

Man, this suspense is killing me, I wanna know why Paloma was up there. Its interesting that she isn't aurprised, so I'm thinking she wasn't there to try and assassinate anyone. What will her excuse be? Maybe she was fighting with someone, or someone forced her out there or made her, or perhaps she was just practising climbing buildings o.O Its iteresting how Shinta has made himself so 'obviously' a suspect for being the assassin, while there seems to be very little suspicion about Paloma being one. Yet another one of your fanfics that has me hooked ^.^ I can't wait to see what will happen when the assassins find out about each other, and I wonder who will find out first.

I really enjoyed reading your fic and I'm excited to see how it all turns out!