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Cool story, i look msjorly omega ultra super forward to the next chapter. (^_^)

now u must update soon!!

Hmmmmm....where to begin?

Alright, first off the premise is interesting, and it could work on so many levels if you put the narration into third person omnicient setting, instead of first person.

The name of the heroine was a bit much, as it was even more hokey than some of the henshin (Transformed) names I have read from created characters on Yahoo groups. This doesn't mean that it's a bad name, but it seems you didn't put much thought into it.

You need to flush out the lead characters more, so the readers can get a grasp of exactly what Katia and Anna's personalities are like. Give a more detailed background on them so they aren't just some humdrum characters. I could send you an example of a really well written story, which has depth and style. Unfortunately this is something you lack, but it seems this is your first foray into the fanfiction world.

Long review, I know. But writing a story is something that takes a while to master, and it cannot be done roughshod otherwise nobody will read what you put out.

~JD ~

I love it a lot !!!please up date soon!!!

I just wonder why you posted it as Mysterious Night Fighter on fanfiction.net........So rather than being smalvina you are anaraz there? I am kinda confuzzled? Why doesn\'t it have the same title and writer on both websites? Is someone plagarizing your story or is it just more fun to post the same story in two different places with different titles under a different pen name?

I miss the old series of Sailor moon don\'t you? Before the censors got their grimey hands on it!

This is so cool! It\'s kind confusing right now, but I have a guess: Kat is one of the starlights? That would sort of explain it. All I can think of is that you need to work on spelling, K?

ss/mmmm

nice chapter
can\'t wait for the next one