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Oh my... that almost made me cry. I have to admit that being a huge fan of Eiri Yuki I tend to get into his frame of mind reading somethings. And that just made me think of him, sitting all alone in his bedroom, watching Shuichi sleep. When he is sure the boy is really sleeping he leans over and kisses him softly before getting up and going to work.... because he is always working and rarely ever sleeping. Anyway... maybe I just think too much.

Fear

NICE! Very to the point.

PIKACHU GODDESS
(o\';\'o)

ooohhh!!! i like. its soo sweet and yuki like. it seems to me like somin he\'d scribble down on a piece of scrap one night when Shu is watching tv and yuki is in the study and is stuck.

It was beautiful!!! So very tender!!!
I LIKED IT!!!

I liked it. Although, I would have to argue that Yuki only gives (up) a "quiet kiss" for his bf. ~_^
Anyway, I am not sure why you were begging for a review exactly, but I did enjoy your poem! I thought it had to rhythm and flow. I like your word choice.
If you hadn't mentioned that it was from Yuki's pt of view, I would have gotten that hint from the poem. Hm. I am not sure what you are looking for, but I hope it something like what you were looking for and that I have encouraged you to keep writing!
~Sara

aw! how kyoote! that really does get to the point though. good job!

Nice poem. Like you said, it\'s pretty short and to the point, and I think that it worked out pretty well that way. You should write some more poems from the perspectives of some other characters.

Keep it up!