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by dbzfan

person master30
schedule June 24, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I love your story it was great. Keep up the great work. You are a great author.
schedule August 30, 2009 at 12:00 AM
mmm, that was so hot! You've GOT TO make a sequel for this story! ;-)
person Skull
schedule October 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Uhhhhhhhhhhhhh Are you an ameture or something because this is not the right format please look over other people's work and get a descent look at what you should right but you're probably sayin I'm one to talk well ha just if you gonna make another please fix it alot

Skull J. Darkmaster "The most preverted guy in Lucifer's opinion" Is out
schedule June 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Not bad, although it was a little difficult to read at times. If I may suggest you put each new speaker on a nwe line. It would make things so much easier.

Otherwise it looked good.
schedule December 17, 2006 at 12:00 AM
LOL OMFG THEY USED KARROTS??? ROFFFFFLLL THIS IS SO FUNNY I HAVE NEVER READ A YURI LEMON BEFORE BUT JUST IMAGINING SOMETHING LIKE THAT IN AN INNOCENT ANIME IS HALARIOUS!!!!!!!!!!! OH, GOD I CAN'T FEEL MY RIB CAGE!!XD
person CrazyIvan(notloggedin)
schedule November 15, 2006 at 12:00 AM
BACK YOU FOUL BEASTS! BACK I SAY! **smacked on of the flesh eating pandas with a iron rod**
Damn those pandas, they're after me for messing around in the bamboo cage. Anyways, nice story here, pretty well written for your first one, a tad bit short, but nothing to bad. I look forward if you're making a sequal, very very interesting. Just, try not to use the hampsters in any sexual way, it's just un sanitary. :\ Ivan out....
person ruleroftravels
schedule October 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Great, great story! Loved it =^^=
person JdWheels
schedule December 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Please do a sequel, I must see more. That was well written.

Check mine out on here... you might get a kick out of my depraved mind.
person Magicalbunny
schedule September 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
please write more it was so good i need more
person The Tap Dancing Otter
schedule January 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
ha ha ha, a hamtaro fanfic. A pretty good one too.

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