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December 16, 2004 at 12:00 AM
kewl, kept on updating
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October 17, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Awwwwwwwwwwwww! Poor Luffy!! Update soon!
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October 13, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I wouldn't say it didn't interest me, so you better hurry up and update... ... ...that's as much compliment you are getting from me now *pouts* go write more, my little slave writer. XD (jokin)
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September 29, 2004 at 12:00 AM
eeeeeeeeeek! I need more! Onegai! *best puppy look* please e-mail me with updates.
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September 3, 2004 at 12:00 AM
XD
"Wanna screw?"
XD
I love this already! The last time I came here, I was disappointed at the number of Luffy yaoi fics, but now look at AFF.net now! It's evolving! Love it, continue!
"Wanna screw?"
XD
I love this already! The last time I came here, I was disappointed at the number of Luffy yaoi fics, but now look at AFF.net now! It's evolving! Love it, continue!
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August 25, 2004 at 12:00 AM
*beams*Why,thank you!I'm glad to be of service!*bows,trips,falls on her face*.
So,then,on to the new chapter.Poor poor Luffy-ko,to be used like that by an ebil man.(muahahahahah!!!!!!)
And right in f of of his brother too*winces*
You wrote Luffy's mother!You rock socks!Even Odacchi hasn't gotten around to explaining his parents yet.You used one of my favorite songs no less!
We beg to know more!
Was his father Shanks by any remote possibility?
Are you going to feature any of the other regulars?(Nami,Usopp,Chopper........wait maybe not the reindeer.)
Where,oh where did Ace go?
Write,write!(Pokes with Inspiration stick.)
So,then,on to the new chapter.Poor poor Luffy-ko,to be used like that by an ebil man.(muahahahahah!!!!!!)
And right in f of of his brother too*winces*
You wrote Luffy's mother!You rock socks!Even Odacchi hasn't gotten around to explaining his parents yet.You used one of my favorite songs no less!
We beg to know more!
Was his father Shanks by any remote possibility?
Are you going to feature any of the other regulars?(Nami,Usopp,Chopper........wait maybe not the reindeer.)
Where,oh where did Ace go?
Write,write!(Pokes with Inspiration stick.)
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August 11, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Luffy's b?!?!?!?!?!?!!?
I can't wait for more story, because of coarse this isn't about smut at all, right? ;-)
Can't wait for more! I have passed this on to several other of my friends, who hopefully review you as well. ^_^
I think it is very interesting that you have included Ace in your story, and him leaving about the same point in Luffy's life.
I can't wait for more story, because of coarse this isn't about smut at all, right? ;-)
Can't wait for more! I have passed this on to several other of my friends, who hopefully review you as well. ^_^
I think it is very interesting that you have included Ace in your story, and him leaving about the same point in Luffy's life.
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August 10, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Wai!Finally a yaoi One Piece slave fic!
Keep writing,this sukebe fangirl is waiting eagerly for the next chapter.
The story itself has some slight glitches and hangups,it would be good if you could explain their world a little more in detail.How did Ace and Luffy end up in Kuro's hands?Who bought Ace and why is Luffy blind?Is Shanks in this world and what role does he play?Are there pirates at all?
To give dimension to the story it would be good to flesh it out a bit more,that way more people will become interested and want to read more.
A spellchecker and prereader is always a good thing to have.
Well,that's my review,i hope it is constructive and helps you in your writing.
Have a good day!Ja ne!
Keep writing,this sukebe fangirl is waiting eagerly for the next chapter.
The story itself has some slight glitches and hangups,it would be good if you could explain their world a little more in detail.How did Ace and Luffy end up in Kuro's hands?Who bought Ace and why is Luffy blind?Is Shanks in this world and what role does he play?Are there pirates at all?
To give dimension to the story it would be good to flesh it out a bit more,that way more people will become interested and want to read more.
A spellchecker and prereader is always a good thing to have.
Well,that's my review,i hope it is constructive and helps you in your writing.
Have a good day!Ja ne!