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July 9, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Just a nitpick, but the hymen is located at the entrance to the vagina. Other than that, it was a cute story, and I liked the ending. :)
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September 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hello, your lemon was cute! love it!
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May 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Aside from a couple grammar mistakes it was good! I liked the way you did this, a little short but sweet. Keep writing.
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March 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
*falls out of chair*
Sheesh, I know Tomoyo likes to film Sakura, but geeze! Some things just shouldn\'t be filmed... Though I can sort of see something like this happening. Tomoyo will probably tag along on Sakura\'s Honeymoon, just to film all that is Sakura.
You probably could have done a bit better with your writing style, but I did enjoy it. The end really made me smile... and my water nearly spurted out of my nose. *sweat-drops*
Sheesh, I know Tomoyo likes to film Sakura, but geeze! Some things just shouldn\'t be filmed... Though I can sort of see something like this happening. Tomoyo will probably tag along on Sakura\'s Honeymoon, just to film all that is Sakura.
You probably could have done a bit better with your writing style, but I did enjoy it. The end really made me smile... and my water nearly spurted out of my nose. *sweat-drops*
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September 16, 2003 at 12:00 AM
That little Tomoyo, she\'s a little pervert for taping that. LOL. J/K. That was a good one. It seemed a bit rushed like everything happened all at once, but it was good.
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June 10, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Hoo boy. Bunch of grammar mistakes, but at least the lemon was ok. Anyway, keep up the good work!!