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for Traitors Embrace, Inhuman Creation

by sadsally

person Love You
schedule May 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
OH MY GOD your back and better then ever, i loved the part about the playful banter between Amon and robin, i can wait for you to update again
person Megan Consoer
schedule March 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you write some more chapters?
person becki
schedule March 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
oh, i just love this story its getting good........im guesing robinis phoenix,update soon please p.s. sorry for miss spells
person NUNI
schedule January 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is good. I like it so far, it\'s interesting. So who is this other guy who loves her but stabs her?! That\'s fucked up! Anyway what her relationship with Seth? Just to be evil and make Amon suffer a little longer why not have Seth make Amon a little jelous.=p Update soon!! ^-^
person Megan Consoer
schedule December 22, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you write some more chapters?
person oldwolf
schedule October 13, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Interesting so far, great story I hope it's continued. Please though, please get a beta reader. It might slow down updates, but the grammer and blatant misspellings are painful.
person Paranoid
schedule August 31, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I like where this is going. I am glad you have Amon seeing Robin in this more mature light. I wish I had thought of that. :>)
I like your style, darker than most Writeriters.
Would you like a beta? I lurve to beta. (just an offer. all offers are free and since this is so, you can ball this one up and toss it to the fishes)
person The Sock
schedule August 26, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Robin THREW the ball at Amon.

Robin climbed THROUGH the window.

Threw, past e ofe of the the verb throw.

Through, an adverb, preposition or adjective. Used generally to describe passage between something, or from one point to another. Adjectively it can also be used to describe completion.

Same sound, different spellings and uses. Please make note of this for future chapters. Remember, Spell and Grammar check can only take you so far. It's important that you personally screen your story for errors.

This irked me, otherwise, the plot seems to be progressing nicely.
person Megan Consoer
schedule August 16, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story alot. Can you write some more chapters?
person Paranoid
schedule August 16, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Wow! You came back and strong. Thank you for adressing my concerns. Nicely done. There are still a few times nearer the end with capitilization keeps dissaperaing. But all in all, highly improved.

I like where this story is heading. Please keep writing. You have guts.

Sincerly,
Paranoid

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