schedule
September 5, 2005 at 12:00 AM
your fic wasn\'t bad, it could have been a little more detailed, but other than that it was fine. and good job!
schedule
March 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Honestly?.. It was bad.
1. Setsuna has black hair with just a green tint to it. Like Raye has black haoir with a purple tint to it.
2. It dosent seem real
3. Setsuna has done so before.
4. Not enough detail and way to short.
5. Every good story has a plot, sayoing yours dosent just proves its bad.
1. Setsuna has black hair with just a green tint to it. Like Raye has black haoir with a purple tint to it.
2. It dosent seem real
3. Setsuna has done so before.
4. Not enough detail and way to short.
5. Every good story has a plot, sayoing yours dosent just proves its bad.
schedule
October 11, 2004 at 12:00 AM
this is the best, i've ever read.Keep it up
schedule
September 18, 2004 at 12:00 AM
A good idea, but you need to focus more on when she cums. That was a little weak.
schedule
August 28, 2004 at 12:00 AM
well...this is good...considering tht it is her first time...she knows how to hit her gspot........anyway...it is good....
schedule
August 18, 2004 at 12:00 AM
i have an account on here, so don't think i'm annonymus... but yeah. it was cool. it could have been a bit longer, but it was cool.