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November 10, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I like it ^^ I've read it like 4 times and I still love it!
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August 27, 2004 at 12:00 AM
HATORI-SENSEI!!! *major glompage ensues*
Ahem.
Loved the POV. Loved the sexved ved the flow of the story.
You should write more lemyeahyeah? XD
---Kyou
I mean...er..FayeFaye
Ahem.
Loved the POV. Loved the sexved ved the flow of the story.
You should write more lemyeahyeah? XD
---Kyou
I mean...er..FayeFaye
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August 27, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Reply to Briar: (briar@discount-muse.com)
First and foremost, thank you for taking the time to read my story :)
Second, thanks for reviewing the story! And it was a rather detailed one too, and that is always the kind of feedback a writer wants to improve his or her craft.
Hn... the yukatta thing, yes, I believe your observation is right. I was kind of placing this story somewhat between the seasons (i.e. the change of weather between Winter and Spring). But I guess the weather is still not warm enough for that kind of clothing. Thanks for pointing that out! I think I'll try and swing it so the outfit fits even in that kind of weather (heh, I'll think of something ^_~).
I'm glad you enjoyed my first foray into the yaoi fandom.
Thanks again! And long live yaoi XD
First and foremost, thank you for taking the time to read my story :)
Second, thanks for reviewing the story! And it was a rather detailed one too, and that is always the kind of feedback a writer wants to improve his or her craft.
Hn... the yukatta thing, yes, I believe your observation is right. I was kind of placing this story somewhat between the seasons (i.e. the change of weather between Winter and Spring). But I guess the weather is still not warm enough for that kind of clothing. Thanks for pointing that out! I think I'll try and swing it so the outfit fits even in that kind of weather (heh, I'll think of something ^_~).
I'm glad you enjoyed my first foray into the yaoi fandom.
Thanks again! And long live yaoi XD
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August 27, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Reply to Babyfabgs:
Kyou... >.<
Behave yourself neko. Else, you shall not get the Lemon That Never Was (Hatori x Kyou) fic.
*patented Hatori glare*
Kyou... >.<
Behave yourself neko. Else, you shall not get the Lemon That Never Was (Hatori x Kyou) fic.
*patented Hatori glare*
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August 25, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Before I start on the praise, I'll offer one tiny, nitpicky thing I noticed. Hatori thinks about how Akito is always sick in the winter, which makes me think this takes place in the winter. If it does, it's unlikely that Shigure would be wearing a yukata, even inside. A regular kimono, yes, but a yukata is a lighter version generally worn in summer. For me at least, when I hear yukata I think of warmer weather than the typical winter.
Otherwise... Wow! You seriously have the characterization down pat. I could hear the voices as I read the story, and everything fit perfectly. For your first time writing yaoi, your sex scene was excellent. Very hot, and all the detail was great. Shigure always seems to know what everyone needs, and in this case I'm sure he was happy to give it up. This is a sweet, sexy story that I thouroughly enjoyed. Fabulous.
Otherwise... Wow! You seriously have the characterization down pat. I could hear the voices as I read the story, and everything fit perfectly. For your first time writing yaoi, your sex scene was excellent. Very hot, and all the detail was great. Shigure always seems to know what everyone needs, and in this case I'm sure he was happy to give it up. This is a sweet, sexy story that I thouroughly enjoyed. Fabulous.