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August 26, 2004 at 12:00 AM
For GOD'S SAKE, PLEASE don't write a story all in one paragraph! That is SO annoying. You should start a new paragraph every time a different person is speaking, or whenever the subject changes. PLEASE, this is such an EASY thing to fix and it would make your sories SO much more readable.
Other than that, good story.
Other than that, good story.