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July 15, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Leaving the chapter at this point has intrigued me and many reviewers have come to the same conclusion that I have: Yue will humiliate or rape Touya as Sakura watches. You mentioned Yue's control slowly slipping so will this be the moment he 'snaps' and harms Touya. Even though Yue would kill for Touya it also looks like he thinks it is ok to harm Touya himself to 'teach' him so I'm thinking that will be the punishment.
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July 15, 2007 at 12:00 AM
That boy is in such a denial state, that its physically hurting him. Poor, poor Touya. Maybe Yue can hire a psychologist for him to deal with his issues...after the whipping XD
Now, the cliffhanger wasn't really that bad as the one when he found the escape route. *That* one was bad; however I had the feeling you would be updating on friday. Why yesterday? well, you know you have reached a high level of fandom when you remember a fictional character's birthday. Syaoran's birthday was July 13, and I kinda hoped more syaoran scenes in this update, besides it was friday the 13th, just plain unlucky. But never mind that, the chapter was great. I laughed out loud while reading the scene where Yue is *busy* with Touya, and is very loving, and Touya can only think about escaping. I had the feeling when he was saying goodbye though, that he was about to say "I love you"
“Toya?”
“I – wait, I -”
“Toya, I must go.”
hehe. I yelled with Touya when sakura fell, but not because of that, but I kept on reading and saw the yue blur and instead of thinking "poor sakura" I was like "nooo, you are now getting whipped!" I wouldnt like if Yue rapes him in front of Sakura, he must have some sense of decorum. But I guess he could slap him in front of her. Oh, and Touya definitely deserves a whipping, but maybe we could have some angsty fight *before* the whipping, I have a feeling he wont be up for it afterwards XD
And Ralen MUST pay for being soo easily tricked! I mean, he was the one that got his keys stolen.
And lastly, I loved this line
"his life destroyed"
because there's a very similar phrase in spanish used for this kind of situations, "se desgracio la vida" which actually sounds very cool. Keep it up, and I'll see you then in a couple of weeks ^_^
PS-I found this really nifty thing on Inet about free mailing lists, so you can send them out and people sign it out on their own, if you are interested
Now, the cliffhanger wasn't really that bad as the one when he found the escape route. *That* one was bad; however I had the feeling you would be updating on friday. Why yesterday? well, you know you have reached a high level of fandom when you remember a fictional character's birthday. Syaoran's birthday was July 13, and I kinda hoped more syaoran scenes in this update, besides it was friday the 13th, just plain unlucky. But never mind that, the chapter was great. I laughed out loud while reading the scene where Yue is *busy* with Touya, and is very loving, and Touya can only think about escaping. I had the feeling when he was saying goodbye though, that he was about to say "I love you"
“Toya?”
“I – wait, I -”
“Toya, I must go.”
hehe. I yelled with Touya when sakura fell, but not because of that, but I kept on reading and saw the yue blur and instead of thinking "poor sakura" I was like "nooo, you are now getting whipped!" I wouldnt like if Yue rapes him in front of Sakura, he must have some sense of decorum. But I guess he could slap him in front of her. Oh, and Touya definitely deserves a whipping, but maybe we could have some angsty fight *before* the whipping, I have a feeling he wont be up for it afterwards XD
And Ralen MUST pay for being soo easily tricked! I mean, he was the one that got his keys stolen.
And lastly, I loved this line
"his life destroyed"
because there's a very similar phrase in spanish used for this kind of situations, "se desgracio la vida" which actually sounds very cool. Keep it up, and I'll see you then in a couple of weeks ^_^
PS-I found this really nifty thing on Inet about free mailing lists, so you can send them out and people sign it out on their own, if you are interested
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July 15, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This chapter was so suspenseful. When Sakura fell, I almost thought all her powers would suddenly awaken and she'd rescue herself, but Yue rescuing her brings so much back and now Touya's in massive trouble. Punishment worse than before? Cripes. Also, Sakura managed to keep Syaoran and their relationship from Touya! There were about 5 times where I thought she'd blurt it out for sure. Then there's that thing with Li and how he can't remember what Touya said, exactly...I can't either and I'll be reading closely to see what happens with that. And also how Li reacts to the attempted escape.
But my favorite part of this chapter was when Yue rescued Sakura. I got so nervous for a minute there, and then Yue swooping down in blue and white was really great, and so was Touya's reaction to her survival. Anyway thanks for the chapter, really really hope the next one comes soon!!
-lili
But my favorite part of this chapter was when Yue rescued Sakura. I got so nervous for a minute there, and then Yue swooping down in blue and white was really great, and so was Touya's reaction to her survival. Anyway thanks for the chapter, really really hope the next one comes soon!!
-lili
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July 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Ohhh man! Ta Boo mentioned a really funny similarity, and hahaha it's so true! Wow, actually after reading everyone else's idea... I kind of have to disagree with the theories of Yue doing something to Sakura, because you know, Capitalist didn't say anything about her--just Touya. Which means he's going to get the brunt of whatever punishment is in store.
I really don't want to think about that though. Obviously I think the two will go into lockdown after this, no matter what. No leaving the castle. I hope Sakura still gets her afternoon walks...but somehow I doubt it...
I really don't want to think about that though. Obviously I think the two will go into lockdown after this, no matter what. No leaving the castle. I hope Sakura still gets her afternoon walks...but somehow I doubt it...
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July 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
OMG!!!! FInally! I've been waiting for you to write some more! Please don't let Touya get too beaten up! Angst is good but you should let it be more emotional hurt. DON'T LEAVE ANY MORE CLIFFIES! THEY'RE KILLING ME!
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July 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
You know, I was okay with the cliffhanger. I was all 'nooo' but I'd survive. Then, silly me, read the author note saying:
"Can’t say if the next update will be one or two weeks, kids, but I can say that I know exactly what’s going to happen and wow, do I feel sorry for Touya. You think he got punished before? You ain’t seen nuthin yet."
You're a terrible, terrible person, lol
"Can’t say if the next update will be one or two weeks, kids, but I can say that I know exactly what’s going to happen and wow, do I feel sorry for Touya. You think he got punished before? You ain’t seen nuthin yet."
You're a terrible, terrible person, lol
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July 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
*double posts*
I really think something is going to be done in front of Sakura, but in the back of my mind I know Yue has this sort of respect for Sakura. But, in the back of my mind I don't feel like this story can be complete until Sakura sees Yue raping Toya in front of her. He'd be loving it so much at this point but his pride and dignity would be shot down and WOULD be the worst punishment for him. Especially if Sakura had become part of it. There would have to be lots of force for Toya to put up with this, but I think it would bt the worst punishment. We're not talking about physical pain of lashings, we're talking about Toya's most valuable part of his being. His pride.
I really think something is going to be done in front of Sakura, but in the back of my mind I know Yue has this sort of respect for Sakura. But, in the back of my mind I don't feel like this story can be complete until Sakura sees Yue raping Toya in front of her. He'd be loving it so much at this point but his pride and dignity would be shot down and WOULD be the worst punishment for him. Especially if Sakura had become part of it. There would have to be lots of force for Toya to put up with this, but I think it would bt the worst punishment. We're not talking about physical pain of lashings, we're talking about Toya's most valuable part of his being. His pride.
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July 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
who they all most make it and and now yuke save saia and tonya is going to be push i can not wait for the next chapter and see. i will be wait for it . good luck on write it. be wait up date soon.
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July 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
one week please! lol.. I hope you like your new home!
Anyway.. hmm.. I imagined them escaping farther before they got caught. They were barely outside the castle, in my opinion! I expected them to actually make it back to their village, settle down again (and have Touya secretly missing Yue all the while :P) for about a week or so, before Yue magically pops up.
Oh god.. nooo.. I think flogging Touya to unconsciousness is bad enough.. ohh, i still shudder thinking about it. I can think of some pretty bad stuff, but I'm not going to say anything for fear of giving you evil ideas, lol
So can we get Yue's pov on this escape? Was he just flying back when he saw them escaping, or did he return back to the castle to find them missing and then go searching? I keeping thinking that Yue comes back to find Touya gone and starts panicking, which is nice in the fact that Yue obviously cares for Touya
Anyhoo, good luck on the next chapter and moving in!
Anyway.. hmm.. I imagined them escaping farther before they got caught. They were barely outside the castle, in my opinion! I expected them to actually make it back to their village, settle down again (and have Touya secretly missing Yue all the while :P) for about a week or so, before Yue magically pops up.
Oh god.. nooo.. I think flogging Touya to unconsciousness is bad enough.. ohh, i still shudder thinking about it. I can think of some pretty bad stuff, but I'm not going to say anything for fear of giving you evil ideas, lol
So can we get Yue's pov on this escape? Was he just flying back when he saw them escaping, or did he return back to the castle to find them missing and then go searching? I keeping thinking that Yue comes back to find Touya gone and starts panicking, which is nice in the fact that Yue obviously cares for Touya
Anyhoo, good luck on the next chapter and moving in!
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July 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
gah, dammit, everyone is talking about what I was thinking anyway :P Actually, I agree with you Mad Hatter. Except I think Yue's going to punish Sakura somehow instead of Touya (bleh, either Yue's going to do something really bad or else he's giving her over to Ralen- gross!), because to me, that's the ultimate punishment for Touya. Except, yeah, Yue actually has some respect for Sakura now, and if he did do anything bad to her, Touya would NEVER forgive him. Ugh, I'm going to be optimistic and hope that it's just another beating of doom or something like that.