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April 30, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Okay, so, I've finally decided to make a review. Now, I've been following this story since about a day after you posted the first chapter. And I have to say, you are amazing! The way you have kept so many people captivated to you story for so long and the way you write is truly amazing! I do hope this story has a happy ending though. And like, how did Yue get so powerful if hewas a pleasure slave to begin with? Or was he always that powerful? Or did Clow give him those powers?
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April 30, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This chapter was definitely heart wrenching. I wonder if Touya could ever forgive him for that... Yue nearly killed him. I get the feeling that Touya is going to remember everything that Syaoran said. I'm not sure if he'll do anything about it though... He might be too beaten to even feel like doing anything. And poor Sakura! I wonder how she is going to feel about Yue now... Then again, he still did nothing to her so at least she isn't afraid of him. I think she's just angry and upset, especially after knowing how Yue feels about Touya. I didn't realize it would get to be this bad though. I hope things heal well.
By the way, something I've been wondering: are you a male or female? The name Capitalist doesn't give much away, and I don't remember anything from author's notes, or your profile... From your writing I would assume that you're a female but one never wants to assume anything. D:
By the way, something I've been wondering: are you a male or female? The name Capitalist doesn't give much away, and I don't remember anything from author's notes, or your profile... From your writing I would assume that you're a female but one never wants to assume anything. D:
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April 30, 2007 at 12:00 AM
ow my gad!!!!
poor toya, but it looks like yue is startin 2 regret his actions.
pls pls update again soon, i adore dis story so much.
poor toya, but it looks like yue is startin 2 regret his actions.
pls pls update again soon, i adore dis story so much.
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April 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Ok....That chapter was AMAZING!!! I really liked the ending with Li and Sakura, it was so cute >_
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April 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Omg....Touya...the next chapter....please hurry
your writing is as beautiful as Yue T-T
your writing is as beautiful as Yue T-T
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April 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
absolutely amazing. and you are updating rather quickly, which is AWESOME!! I totally think the castle is going to be attacked, and I cant wait. Hopefully Sakura and her brother get to use some awesome mojo and li and sakura get to have some hot sex. And then use LOTS of whiteout on her collar to hide their crime. Bleach could work too...
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April 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I'm sorry, I'm not one for really thinking things out. I don't really have any thoughts on where you might be going with the plot. I don't think like that. I just anticipate and look forward to things. And I look forward to a new chapter every week. xD But I don't have any speculations for you. :/ This is just.. an awesome fic. Usually I'm not one for AU things, but you have made these characters I really like [especially Yue, he is my favorite] and made them your own. But I'm fairly sure that I'd be able to tell who they were, even in this strange world. And... your writing style is excellent and exciting, keep it up!! I'm glad it's not going to be done in only nine chapters, I'm glad to look forward to lots of new installments of this story. :]
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April 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Well, at least now we know what was in that room. And as to that dungeon scene, ouch...(>.<) And I thought I was being nasty when I had Chibiusa/Rini whipped in my Sailor Moon Fic, "Roman Legends"! In hindsight, I let her off pretty easy... And Sakura forgets her fear of Yue for a moment. I can't help but notice, though, that nobody commented on the wings, or were they too distracted for them to click in? Wouldn't blame them, really...
More than forty chapters? Seriously?! Whoa... Well, I eagerly await #32! Laters.
More than forty chapters? Seriously?! Whoa... Well, I eagerly await #32! Laters.
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April 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Well, at least now we know what was in that room. And as to that dungeon scene, ouch...(wince) And I thought I was being nasty when I had Chibiusa/Rini get whipped in my Sailor Moon fic, "Roman Legends"! In hindsight, I actually went pretty easy on her... And Sakura forgets her fear of Yue! And I couldn't help but notice that no one commented on his wings. Or were they just too distracted to notice? Wouldn't blame them...
More than forty chapters? Seriously?! Whoa.... Laters.
[I hate it when reviews malfunction like that...]
More than forty chapters? Seriously?! Whoa.... Laters.
[I hate it when reviews malfunction like that...]
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April 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
!!!!! This is like a turning point for me. I wonder how Touya is going to react when he wakes up. (Badly, I hope... I'm one of those people who want the suffering unhappy couple to get some closure, but when the happy bunny closure does come, I'm never satisfied. Might as well go back to the suffering and unhappy. lol)
And I also wonder what Yue's real role was with Clow; whether Touya was right and he was a pleasure slave that Clow acquired, or whether Clow made him and just had him as a lover. While reading I also thought that maybe Yue is bound to the castle and that he can't leave! (that line where he wants to fly away and never return...like the hyenas tell Simba in the Lion King, haha)
I loved the part where Touya steals Li's knife. And I thought the scenes where Li intervened with the punishment and when he tells the unconscious Touya that he and Sakura were together were great. I thought Li's pure hatred/dislike for Touya in one part was a little unfounded though; the part where he's like, "I wouldn't have minded if you had died down there". I thought that was kind of cold. I think that if I had just seen even my proudest, most stubborn, hotshot but fairly sort of harmless enemy nearly beaten to death, I would have a bit more sympathy. I think that it didn't fit in with all of Li's other actions and words, which were more sympathetic, so that was the only OOC thing for me I guess.
Oh, and the part where Li calls Sakura his "hysterical girlfriend" was hilarious. I love that aspect of Li.
Things I look forward to:
Touya POSSIBLY being sort of awake and hearing that Li and his sister were together, that not happening but having the shit still hit the fan, renewed attempts at escape, Touya going crazy trying to figure out Clow, Yue going crazy trying to figure out his feelings and how to deal, Li macking Sakura, Touya being macked by Yue again ("DONT TOUCH ME"), YUKITOOOOO (hey maybe Yue feels so unable to meet his slave face to face that he shapechanges into an innocent boy who likes to eat a lot and who Touya of falls in love with, not gonna happen I know), and Touya macking Ralen. (haha just kidding.)
Anyway thanks for the chapter! One of my favorites!
And I also wonder what Yue's real role was with Clow; whether Touya was right and he was a pleasure slave that Clow acquired, or whether Clow made him and just had him as a lover. While reading I also thought that maybe Yue is bound to the castle and that he can't leave! (that line where he wants to fly away and never return...like the hyenas tell Simba in the Lion King, haha)
I loved the part where Touya steals Li's knife. And I thought the scenes where Li intervened with the punishment and when he tells the unconscious Touya that he and Sakura were together were great. I thought Li's pure hatred/dislike for Touya in one part was a little unfounded though; the part where he's like, "I wouldn't have minded if you had died down there". I thought that was kind of cold. I think that if I had just seen even my proudest, most stubborn, hotshot but fairly sort of harmless enemy nearly beaten to death, I would have a bit more sympathy. I think that it didn't fit in with all of Li's other actions and words, which were more sympathetic, so that was the only OOC thing for me I guess.
Oh, and the part where Li calls Sakura his "hysterical girlfriend" was hilarious. I love that aspect of Li.
Things I look forward to:
Touya POSSIBLY being sort of awake and hearing that Li and his sister were together, that not happening but having the shit still hit the fan, renewed attempts at escape, Touya going crazy trying to figure out Clow, Yue going crazy trying to figure out his feelings and how to deal, Li macking Sakura, Touya being macked by Yue again ("DONT TOUCH ME"), YUKITOOOOO (hey maybe Yue feels so unable to meet his slave face to face that he shapechanges into an innocent boy who likes to eat a lot and who Touya of falls in love with, not gonna happen I know), and Touya macking Ralen. (haha just kidding.)
Anyway thanks for the chapter! One of my favorites!
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