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by Capitalist

schedule April 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Well, that answers the question of whether he still has wings or not. I'd wondered about that at first myself when he first entered the tale, but then just sort of gave it nor more thought - wasn't really relevant, after all. And, oh yeah, Syoaran's turning of Sakura's collar to black is so imminent! It's just a matter of time before he breaks - that, or he and/or Sakura actually asks Yue permission to have a full relationship(hopefully without Touya present, as i imagine he'd probably throw a pitch fit!). And boy, quite the chewing out at the end there from the author - not that Capitalist didn't have a good reason. Hopefully the braindead morons out there will have gotten the message. Well, I can't think of anything else to say at the moment, so, laters.
person BillyTheCad
schedule April 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I don't normally look at reviews - I feel that the writing should speak for itself and fangirl/boy splooge on the review page shouldn't influence whether or not a story is good. However, at your latest AN I just had to take a gander and, hooo-boy, do some people need to realize something - This isn't their story, don't complain about how a writer continues some scenes or quits certain parts that are no longer valuable to the story (such as the yuri.) You have created a great piece of work here - In fact, this story is the only reason I still check out AFF (talk about fanboy splooge on your review page ::grin::).

Now, about the chapter. Heh, I was wondering when Yue's wings were going to come into play! He's just not Yue without his wings, yannow? And his little disappearances... Excuse me while I blather. Well, in the anime/manga Yue draws his strength from Sakura, but because her powers weren't strong enough, he got his strength from Touya. During one of Touya and Yue's conversations in this fic, Yue reveals that he gets *some* of his powers from the moon, but that brings up the question - where else does he get his strength from? Since he's getting strength from neither Touya nor Sakura, that means (to me) that he must be gettign it from someone else. Thinking back to the anime and all who has magical ability, that would leave me with two people - Kaho, and Eriol. While I have an inkling that Kaho might return later in the fic, I don't think she's the person Yue draws strength from. That leaves Eriol.

Of course, he seems tired and weak when he returns... that looses me. I guess I'll have to wait here patiently until you reveal all.

Heh, now I am sort of curious to Touya's reaction if/when he meets Ruby Moon and Spinal Sun and... Hey, what about Kero? Are we ever going to see that cute lil' stuffed animal?

Okay, I'm going to stop now, because I'm probably crossing the line of what those people who ticked you off just did. Take care, and I'm looking forward to the next chapter!
person Shea1
schedule April 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Its such a good story, I love every bit of it. Its genuinely better than most published books I have read. Please keep writing and congratulations on finishing your taxes.
person Black Shinigami
schedule April 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Well screw THOSE jackasses who dissed this story. Personally, I think it's brilliant! I love the dynamics of the plot, the relationships of the pairings, both platonic and romantic, and I love the dimensions you've given the characters I loved from CCS. Yue and Touya's relationship captured me in it's snare and I don't want to escape. From a pleasure slave to a lover. And yet Yue can get jealous, he keeps secrets... he can FEEL... I love this aspect of him. Touya's love and protectiveness for his sister always make me smile because he's such a wonderful brother and his devotion to care for them both, even now as captives, is inspiring. And it's nice to see the familiar tension between Touya and Syaoran, I was glad you put that in there. Always made me laugh in CCS. As well as Syao/Saku's forbidden love. I'm always anxious and afraid they'll get caught, but it's beautiful that they're willing to risk severe punishment for love. Tomoyo and Meilin's chapter appearances always make me smile and I know Ralen will eventually get his....he's the one thing I hate in your story because naturally, sometimes you're gonna hate the villian, but you've made him an utterly devious villian...he's sneaky & conniving and I love THAT about him. But I have a feeling something big is about to happen. REALLY big. Now that Touya can't help but want to know of Clow... and that ominous presence he can now feel. This is going to be so good. I can't wait!

And don't let those critics get you down. You're writing a magnificent story and they're too much of a bunch of dumbasses to see it! I look foward to your new chapters!
person Black Shinigami
schedule April 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Btw, I LOVED YUE'S WINGS!! IT MADE ME SO HAPPY INSIDE!! Now I can't stop smiling! And they're sensative too?! Yummy...Just... awesomeness...

~Black Shinigami (aka Chi-chan)
person Mel
schedule April 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Well, I haven't read or reviewed in a while. I didn't know you updated. And imagine my surprise when I find not one chapter but four to read and enjoy. Thank you so much.

As for your outburst, you go! I recently started writing fanfiction and I know that I have never had any reviews like that, but I can imagine it and honestly tell you that it would make me mad as well.

Anyways, I have to admit the suspense is killing me. I think it is clear that Sakura, Touya and Syaoran are all descendants of Clow, just like in the anime. I myself haven't read the manga, but I would imagine it's like that as well. Also I think Clow made Li's family sword (I'm not sure if that is explained in the anime/manga)

I'm really loving the plot line. I don't like to assume too much because anything could happen. I do have some predictions though. I can't wait to see if any of them are right.

Again, thank you for this wonderful story.

Your loyal reader,
Mel
person Mel
schedule April 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Damn! I just went back and read those posts that you were talking about and all I can say is damn! Pardon my language but that is really fucked up. I feel for you. I am extremely attatched to this story and if those comments hurts me that much, I can't imagine how it was for you.

I am quite offended and it's not even my story. I send much love and support to you. You are doing perfect, don't let anyone tell you differently.

Mel
schedule April 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
"Care about what you write more!!" lol. I imagine this must have been extremely hurtful, but I find hilarity in that review's utter nonsense. I can't imagine it was meant to be taken seriously. If it was, there are more idiots in the world than I thought.

It's really unfortunate that such a talented writer had to get caught up in the whole spam email thing. Yeah, I know it probably doesn't help to joke about it, but if I'd received an email directing me to this story I'd be pretty damn happy. I mean, it's a great bloody story, hands down.

And I'm into yuri, but you have the right to do what you please with your story - I don't know where people get the idea that they are in control of what an author does. If they were paying you it might be a different story. :D I also think it's pretty rude and cold to ignore the beauty of the relationship you're developing for Sakura...and here I thought on the internet people were all about "love surpasses gender", what with reading billions of yaoi readers and all. Apparently not.

I hardly review, I can't remember if I ever have, but it's an excellent fic - the greatest CCS fic of all time at the moment. Your skill in writing is obviously growing and your plot remains interesting. Keep it up!
person Kitt
schedule April 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I don't know why someone would complain about your story. I have enjoyed reading your building of the characters and cannot wait to see where the storyline goes. Keep going and I'll continue to read it.
Many hugs and purrs, Kitt
person CT
schedule April 17, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I have never reviewed any of the thousands of fanfictions I have read during my life, but I want you to know that I genuinely (hope that's spelled right!) enjoy yours. I can really tell that this fiction means a lot to you, and it really saddens me that you get so many negative responses to your gift. I look forward to a new chapter, no matter how long it takes for an update. I also love that you make long chapters that remind you of what you love about the story, and seduce you into wanting more.

Many times I have read fanfictions that inspire me to 'add-on' or completely change the flow of the story (in my mind and on paper, of course). When I read Pleasure Slave I don't feel the desire to do that. There is no other way that I can see your vision going. All I can do is wait for your vision to present itself. I know that you must feel very frustrated and unappreciated when you have demanding and/or insincere replies to your 'baby'.

I do not have much time anymore to read, but whenever I get the chance I look forward to checking up on your progress. Your gift is a treasure to me!

(This must sound so weird to you!)

With Sincere Thanks,

CT

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