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October 7, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Pointing out certain aspects of the story that I liked be damned! A, there are waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaay too many of them, and B, I just feel like having a good old whine. So here it is.
Pleeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeease give me more! This whole fic has been like a book that I just can't put down. I was actually just thinking some chapters ago how much it reminded me of Iason and Riki, both in appearance and situation, and when I saw the mention of it straight afterwards, I burst out laughing. So well-timed.
Just as a point of interest, how long does it actually take for someone as strong-willed and determined as Touya to be completely undone by Yue? What would it take? It's the answers to questions like that that fascinate me about this fic.
This isn't a conventional sort of master/slave situation either. As a reader, I usually find that the slaves are normally one of two extremes; shy, timid, virginal little things like Sakura, or stubborn, 'unbreakable' types like Touya and Riki. The masters are usually harsh, or at the very least uncompromising, and live up to their roles perfectly. The strange thing that got me about this fic was, that despite how Yue as a master acts, I just can't bring myself to dislike him at all, and even Iason, gorgeous though he was, still had moments where I couldn't help thinking that he was a downright bastard. I just feel a bit sorry for Yue; he doesn't seem to have had much love ind his past.
I like how you use blackmail. It's very effective for getting people to do what you want, isn't it?
On a rather random note, you have Yue, but will Yukito be making an appearance? When Li, I think, mentioned that he left once every month, my first thought was 'he's PMS-ing'. My excuse for that one is lack of sleep. Then I started having visions of Yue sitting in a crypt or something in the middle of the stereotypical misty cemetery on the night of the new moon and cringing in pain as he morphs into Yukito like some kind of backwards werewolf, losing the length of hair that he has for something shorter, without growing any anywhere else. That thought had me entertained for quite a while.
Wow....I actually managed to write a somewhat coherent review for a change. Normally I would just whine and be very annoying.
That said, please write more and keep me entertained. I'll set up a shrine to you if you do. ;)
Pleeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeease give me more! This whole fic has been like a book that I just can't put down. I was actually just thinking some chapters ago how much it reminded me of Iason and Riki, both in appearance and situation, and when I saw the mention of it straight afterwards, I burst out laughing. So well-timed.
Just as a point of interest, how long does it actually take for someone as strong-willed and determined as Touya to be completely undone by Yue? What would it take? It's the answers to questions like that that fascinate me about this fic.
This isn't a conventional sort of master/slave situation either. As a reader, I usually find that the slaves are normally one of two extremes; shy, timid, virginal little things like Sakura, or stubborn, 'unbreakable' types like Touya and Riki. The masters are usually harsh, or at the very least uncompromising, and live up to their roles perfectly. The strange thing that got me about this fic was, that despite how Yue as a master acts, I just can't bring myself to dislike him at all, and even Iason, gorgeous though he was, still had moments where I couldn't help thinking that he was a downright bastard. I just feel a bit sorry for Yue; he doesn't seem to have had much love ind his past.
I like how you use blackmail. It's very effective for getting people to do what you want, isn't it?
On a rather random note, you have Yue, but will Yukito be making an appearance? When Li, I think, mentioned that he left once every month, my first thought was 'he's PMS-ing'. My excuse for that one is lack of sleep. Then I started having visions of Yue sitting in a crypt or something in the middle of the stereotypical misty cemetery on the night of the new moon and cringing in pain as he morphs into Yukito like some kind of backwards werewolf, losing the length of hair that he has for something shorter, without growing any anywhere else. That thought had me entertained for quite a while.
Wow....I actually managed to write a somewhat coherent review for a change. Normally I would just whine and be very annoying.
That said, please write more and keep me entertained. I'll set up a shrine to you if you do. ;)
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October 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Love the story but I have a question. Is Touya taller than Yue (Just like in the anime)? That would be so cute if Yue's always looking up at his slave. No wonder he always wants Touya on his knees! :
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October 5, 2006 at 12:00 AM
good story plx update soon
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October 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
OMG WHAT A HOT STORY! I started reading it today and only just finished it. Yay!
I noticed something at the end of chapter 22.
Yue's last lines were: "You are mine ... and you always will be"
Was he implying that he is going to keep Touya forever? Or was it just a random comment he said to enforce that he was Touya's master?
Either way Touya didnt seem to pay attention since he still thinks Yue might get bored of him and let him go.
I'm loving that sort of sexual tension between them!
Update soon please
I noticed something at the end of chapter 22.
Yue's last lines were: "You are mine ... and you always will be"
Was he implying that he is going to keep Touya forever? Or was it just a random comment he said to enforce that he was Touya's master?
Either way Touya didnt seem to pay attention since he still thinks Yue might get bored of him and let him go.
I'm loving that sort of sexual tension between them!
Update soon please
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October 2, 2006 at 12:00 AM
YES!! I love this fic. It is so freaking awsome. There are always things that make me crack up laughing, I love the emo parts too. UPDATE SOON!!
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October 1, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Wow... just... oh my. I started reading this on Friday, and it's currently Sunday afternoon. This fic is easily up to par with my other two favorite authors, Iron Dog and Kira Takenouchi. Yue is such a sexy bastard here, I love it! It's lush in detail, it's got such a wonderful set up. The background settings, the intrigue...
They have such a Blondie/mongrel relationship, it's great! At least I can keep Yue in my mind, but whenever I try to picture Touya, I end up seeing naughty Riki. XD And Sakura, poor Sakura. It's great what you've done, making it so... savoury watching Touya be abused, yet you hate whoever would try to hurt Sakura. (Speaking of which, can we PLEASE kill Ralen? I don't even want Li to do it, I want Yue to smite him mightily one of these days!)
Hoping to see more smexy Yue goodness soon,
Snapelicious
They have such a Blondie/mongrel relationship, it's great! At least I can keep Yue in my mind, but whenever I try to picture Touya, I end up seeing naughty Riki. XD And Sakura, poor Sakura. It's great what you've done, making it so... savoury watching Touya be abused, yet you hate whoever would try to hurt Sakura. (Speaking of which, can we PLEASE kill Ralen? I don't even want Li to do it, I want Yue to smite him mightily one of these days!)
Hoping to see more smexy Yue goodness soon,
Snapelicious
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September 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
When's the next chapter?
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September 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Please update soon! You have such a great story here. More Touya/Yue plz!
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September 29, 2006 at 12:00 AM
ooohhhh I just read some of the recent reviews and I like Denef's idea of Yue having wings in this fic. I hope that's included in a future chapter. i always like winged characters to have super sensitive wings in fics.
plz update soon!
plz update soon!
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September 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Once again, this was an amazing chapter. I do enjoy the activities between Yue and Touya a little more than Sakura, as even within the series I found her to be a little unreasonable. In this storyline you have managed to make her come off more as innocent rather than ditzy, and I am sorry to say, but a fool as well, that she was portrayed as in the cartoon series (I never had a chance to read really any of the manga). I am always excited to see a new chapter, and I am usually never dissapointed, the only time my dissapoint reigns is when I discover that there isn't one.
At the end of this chapter you mentioned the idea of changing the names, or such so that you could turn this into a origional piece without animated based characters. I am very much in support of this idea, it is quite obvious to anyone that you have worked very hard on this storyline, and the writing that has gone into it. I believe that with the genre, and with you amazing knack for not only detail but story flow that you should definitly create origional characters (name changes would be simple), and make a profit on all the hard work. There are many sites that publish works such as this, and I believe it isn't as a huge price to the writer.
I do have one question though, and I wanted to ask it earlier. The room that Yue brought Touya into once, with the design on the floor, it seemed to hold great importance in the chapter, but we have yet to see or hear of it in a reapperance fashion. I believe is holds a secret of Yue's, but I don't want to make any predictions.
I cannot wait for the next chapter in 'Pleasure Slave' and I hope that you find yourself in good health.
LuvLuvG's
-Essee-
At the end of this chapter you mentioned the idea of changing the names, or such so that you could turn this into a origional piece without animated based characters. I am very much in support of this idea, it is quite obvious to anyone that you have worked very hard on this storyline, and the writing that has gone into it. I believe that with the genre, and with you amazing knack for not only detail but story flow that you should definitly create origional characters (name changes would be simple), and make a profit on all the hard work. There are many sites that publish works such as this, and I believe it isn't as a huge price to the writer.
I do have one question though, and I wanted to ask it earlier. The room that Yue brought Touya into once, with the design on the floor, it seemed to hold great importance in the chapter, but we have yet to see or hear of it in a reapperance fashion. I believe is holds a secret of Yue's, but I don't want to make any predictions.
I cannot wait for the next chapter in 'Pleasure Slave' and I hope that you find yourself in good health.
LuvLuvG's
-Essee-