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September 6, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Oh this was really good, very nicely detailed. But come on, who doesn't like the taste of chocolate?
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September 6, 2004 at 12:00 AM
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I loooooved the...dare I say it?!...EXQUISITE lemon portrayed in this here fanfic. The absense of chocolate in hard evidence was hardly missed, I assure you. Thank you for writing such an awesome story!
I loooooved the...dare I say it?!...EXQUISITE lemon portrayed in this here fanfic. The absense of chocolate in hard evidence was hardly missed, I assure you. Thank you for writing such an awesome story!
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September 5, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Now _that_ is some Hot Chocolate! X D Very nicely done (er, so to speak). **applauds**
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September 5, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I guess good things come to those who wait for them. ^^ I REALLY couldn't wait for you to finish this - out of all of the 393 writers out there you are definitely my favorite - and wasn't sure when you'd be done with it. Yay for LJ telling me you had posted it! ^^
Anyways, I don't think I have ever seen a smutfic oneshot this long before. It took me awhile to get through it, but I must say that I really enjoyed the ride. I agree with many of the different ways you portrayed their relationship, and the various aspects made it seem more plausable and realistic. For one, the journey taking such a toll on them that they noticed they needed to go to sleep in the middle of foreplay showed how draining their lives are - and it was amusing at the same time. It was also a good point to note how Goku really DID hold the supreme control over the situation in their bedroom. He is MUCH stronger than Sanzo, and it is only by HIS will that there can be any domination on Sanzo's part to ever happen. So many writers seem to forget the fact that Goku is THE strongest character in Saiyuki - and that (physicially) Sanzo is one of the weakest.
One thing I found amusing was the condem. I wasn't aware that they existed in Saiyuki, but then again, in a world of divine credit cards and transforming jeeps, I shouldn't be too surprised. XD
I think, though, that my favorite part of the WHOLE piece would be when Sanzo molested Goku while Goku slept. I actually had an idea to do something along those lines a short while ago, but when I wrote it out it came out much different. Still, I'm glad that I got to see it, and that it was written by such a great writer (you did it much better than I ever hoped to be able to).
All in all, wonderful piece. I'm putting this one on my favorites list. *grins*
-Iapetus
Anyways, I don't think I have ever seen a smutfic oneshot this long before. It took me awhile to get through it, but I must say that I really enjoyed the ride. I agree with many of the different ways you portrayed their relationship, and the various aspects made it seem more plausable and realistic. For one, the journey taking such a toll on them that they noticed they needed to go to sleep in the middle of foreplay showed how draining their lives are - and it was amusing at the same time. It was also a good point to note how Goku really DID hold the supreme control over the situation in their bedroom. He is MUCH stronger than Sanzo, and it is only by HIS will that there can be any domination on Sanzo's part to ever happen. So many writers seem to forget the fact that Goku is THE strongest character in Saiyuki - and that (physicially) Sanzo is one of the weakest.
One thing I found amusing was the condem. I wasn't aware that they existed in Saiyuki, but then again, in a world of divine credit cards and transforming jeeps, I shouldn't be too surprised. XD
I think, though, that my favorite part of the WHOLE piece would be when Sanzo molested Goku while Goku slept. I actually had an idea to do something along those lines a short while ago, but when I wrote it out it came out much different. Still, I'm glad that I got to see it, and that it was written by such a great writer (you did it much better than I ever hoped to be able to).
All in all, wonderful piece. I'm putting this one on my favorites list. *grins*
-Iapetus
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September 5, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Wow...
This turned out so very, very well. I loved the setup and the ending, and of course you know how hot I think your smut is. I *adore* how you write Sanzo. His thought processes are fascinating, and I love seeing Goku through his eyes. And their bedroom talk is *so* sexy!
You've outdone yourself with this one. It's just awesome!
<3~~!
This turned out so very, very well. I loved the setup and the ending, and of course you know how hot I think your smut is. I *adore* how you write Sanzo. His thought processes are fascinating, and I love seeing Goku through his eyes. And their bedroom talk is *so* sexy!
You've outdone yourself with this one. It's just awesome!
<3~~!
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September 5, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I loved it!! XD
Very well written, and the thoughts were so perfectly Sanzo...
Makes me wonder if Sanzo's going to start liking chocolate after this... *g*
Very well written, and the thoughts were so perfectly Sanzo...
Makes me wonder if Sanzo's going to start liking chocolate after this... *g*
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September 5, 2004 at 12:00 AM
hehehe....yah! and here i was, hoping for some chocolatey action. XD
but i like this version much, much more. heheh!!! it's great that you didnt feel the urge to rush anything..! and i really like your style of writing. *gives chocolate* (no pun intended)
anyway!!!
can i expect an epilouge?
write more 39/93!!
but i like this version much, much more. heheh!!! it's great that you didnt feel the urge to rush anything..! and i really like your style of writing. *gives chocolate* (no pun intended)
anyway!!!
can i expect an epilouge?
write more 39/93!!