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October 1, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I love it,I love it!! <3
ehem! now for the constructive critic: if you write something in japanese or spanish,or french,or any other language than the one of the fic,you MUST make notes saying what it means(I missed a lot of dialogue ¬¬ ).
and about that onii-san thing,if I´m not wrong,japanese kids calls "person´s first name"onii/onee-san to the adults they know(or DON´T know,I´m not sure).So I think it must something like "uncle Kyoji"
ehem! now for the constructive critic: if you write something in japanese or spanish,or french,or any other language than the one of the fic,you MUST make notes saying what it means(I missed a lot of dialogue ¬¬ ).
and about that onii-san thing,if I´m not wrong,japanese kids calls "person´s first name"onii/onee-san to the adults they know(or DON´T know,I´m not sure).So I think it must something like "uncle Kyoji"
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October 24, 2005 at 12:00 AM
wow.............intense yet sweet
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November 1, 2004 at 12:00 AM
The name above is not my penname on aff.net...I just forgot my penname. ^^;;;
Anyway, I like this fic a lot, it flows well, has good grammar, and the characters are quite IC :D Very well done.
By the way, what Himiko says before oniisan is probably kakkosuke or kakkosuki (which I believe means Show Off, or literally Too Cool, or Acting Cool, whichever you wish to interpret it as). I'm not 100% sure though.
Good fic.
Anyway, I like this fic a lot, it flows well, has good grammar, and the characters are quite IC :D Very well done.
By the way, what Himiko says before oniisan is probably kakkosuke or kakkosuki (which I believe means Show Off, or literally Too Cool, or Acting Cool, whichever you wish to interpret it as). I'm not 100% sure though.
Good fic.
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September 23, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Sweet! I like your attention to detail and particulars. Keep writing! I'd love to see you handle Shido/Madoka or even Hevn/(who should I put here?)
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September 19, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Hey, this is so beautifully written! Sugoi!!! Never been a kagami/himiko fan but after reading yours, i'm slowly pulling myself into it! gambatte ne!