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October 28, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Heej Cal! I read your story and it's awesome! only there were a lot of mistakes... but I can't blame you, english can be pretty hard. I'm editing this story right now and if you want the edited version, just e-mail me, I have an account here, Karai.
That's all I wanted to say, keep up writing such good lemons!
That's all I wanted to say, keep up writing such good lemons!
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January 22, 2006 at 12:00 AM
They did it so many times in the story.Hope little Shu-Chan doesn't get prostate problems...................
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HOW CAN HE FUCK A FREAKIN' DOOR?!?!?!?!?!!!
that wsa freakin' funny.They turned each other on by the dirty talk and the fights i liked it.
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HOW CAN HE FUCK A FREAKIN' DOOR?!?!?!?!?!!!
that wsa freakin' funny.They turned each other on by the dirty talk and the fights i liked it.
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September 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
there are both pros and cons that come with the kind of fic where yuki is nice. its kind of sweet, yet also OOC, depending whether you think of it as post-series or not, and some people think hed still be a jerk anyway. well, at least you were willing to try it, and i think you mostly pulled it off. just, maybe tone it down a little bit. also i havent read the smuttier version yet XD
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June 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
for english not being your native language, you did awsome with the words. awsome story.
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January 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ya have to do more! I really enjoyed! =3
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December 21, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Your use of english and what to do with tounge is perfectly fine.
chris
chris
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November 18, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Oooh very nice. I love it when characters talk raw and nasty to each other. Delightfully smutty. Yuki being Shuichi's whore for once was an delicious change. Lovely work for English not being your native language.
regards---
cve
regards---
cve
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November 2, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I think that you're doing a really good job with writing in english, keep it up! ( just think, you're most likely better than Bush)lol, i loved the stort and PLEASE KEEP WRITING!!!
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November 2, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I think that you are doing a very good job writing in english, probably better than what i can in french. (just think you're better than Pres. Bush). I enjoyed the story very much and would love for you to write more please.
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October 25, 2004 at 12:00 AM
UWondWonderful writing. It's refreshing to see Shuichi and Yuki on each others cases, and turning it into something sexy. :P
There are some minor grammar, and word usage mistakes, but other than that, you write well.
You don't include annoying author notes in the middle of the story, or use random japanese words for no reason, and you use excellent formatting. *applause*
In fact, you write better than most people who have English as their first language!
Thank you so much for writing this, I really, very much so hope that you continue this fighting series, it's great!
There are some minor grammar, and word usage mistakes, but other than that, you write well.
You don't include annoying author notes in the middle of the story, or use random japanese words for no reason, and you use excellent formatting. *applause*
In fact, you write better than most people who have English as their first language!
Thank you so much for writing this, I really, very much so hope that you continue this fighting series, it's great!