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I liked it, you have very good english compared to my brother and my mom (My bro speaks Japanese (He\'s romanian though) And my mom is Romanian and yeh) So I was fairly impressed ^^ ^^ ^^ ^^ Good job, keep it up - Ja ne-
---- Tsuki ^_^ ^_^ ^_^ ^_^

Y\'know, that other person wasn\'t being \"mean\". They were offering you advice and if you can\'t take that and use it to improve yourself, then you are not an aspiring writing. You are someone who is in it for the reviews and that isn\'t what fanfiction is about at all. Songs need to put into verses, stanzas and be riddled with punctuation and what-not. This peice of drivel you\'ve posted just doesn\'t cut it. What are you: 12? Are you even -old- enough to be on this site? And the peice of fiction in question, isn\'t \"shitty\" because of your computer, it\'s because of the writer. I use to have an old Windows 95 that ran slower than my nan, and I still managed to write fairly decent stuff on it, and certiantly the presentation wasn\'t spoilt because of the -age- of the computer. Not only do you need lessons in TYPING, you need serious lessons in grammar, punctuation and sentence structure. Do you even know what a clause is? Do you know anything about English Language? And you\'re non-USA, eh? Oh what a freaking surpirse: \"I can\'t write that well because I\'m English.. my native tonuge isn\'t English, so please don\'t try to make me write better than a five year old, because -I\'m- not English.\" that, in your situation, is a load of bullshit. If you weren\'t English, then why have you -bothered- to learn Internet slag BEFORE true English? You understand perfectly, as do I; you\'re a little pre-teen in this for the reivews, who kicks up a stink when people don\'t say that they love your work. Give it up now, you\'re pathetic and you\'re wasting the Internet space with this thing that you call a \"song\". If I was you, I\'d be ashamed to admit it was mine.

........ just wanted to put an reveiw to my own fic lol *ducks from chairs being thorwn at her because she is a tart ass* ^_^

A) PUNCTUATION is your friend. Commas, periods, whatever, but you need to indicate the beginning and end to a complete thought.
B) FORMAT, stanzas to a song are like those to a poem. One big paragraph doesn't work. It looks like you used periods to indicate stanzas.

This is elementary stuff here, before you even begin to consider writing ANYTHING else, you need to learn proper English grammer. And no, you should not try for a record deal any time soon.