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for One Night, One Body, One Soul

by shuiede

person kookookitty
schedule July 13, 2006 at 12:00 AM
the words you use are wonderful, very descriptive. the images they conjure up are incredable! if you would like... i would consider proofreading and correcting your grammer so that the words you so eloquently choose in your stories, aren't deminished. it seems that you write with your emotions, you shouldn't lose that, reading your work, those emotions are raw and the reader can truely feel what you express. the delivery and verb tense need work. if you would like, i believe that this sites has beta readers available, or you can contact me at the listed address.
person yamiyugiforever
schedule October 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I loved it...I wanna read a chapter where misao is in laber
person Samurai_Xuxa
schedule October 23, 2004 at 12:00 AM
wow. That was great!! Whoo!! ^_^

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