rate_review Reviews

You wrote a very fun story, though it did feel rushed in some ways. Though the story was fun you writing was somewhat of a chore to read. You almost always used the word "on" when you needed the word "in" Your syntax was often transposed, and you almost never used the proper plurals.

But when all is said and done I still enjoyed the story. :)

P.s. It is not illegal to write a story involving a miner and an adult (in the U.S.A) as long as it is fiction.

I hear ya, the show would have been a lot better if they had one made it longer and included in various things like Jim and Aisha hooking up, more about what happened next and about more of for instance Aisha past and her races culture and some things that were in some other fanfic that i have read that were mainly Aisha X Jim parings, like in one story Mel and Gene have two kids and the kids can each do like their mother and connect with the Galactic Layline and each grant a wish and so Gene, Mel, Sazuka, Aisha and Jim and the two kids go looking for the Layline again so that Jim and Gene can make a wish, Jim to have his life extended to match the life of Aisha cause Aisha can't be in a relationship with a human because of the difference in their lifespans so Jim is getting his life span extended to match that of Aisha so that they can be together and it is basically the same with Genes wish only is it so that he can live on with Mel and their kids and always be together, and the story is about their adventures as they are trying to find the Layline, and Aisha and Jim become a lot closer, and so on, also i REALLY liked this fic i was a great fic and i hope you will continue it, also i think Mel has plenty of personality it's just that she is the quiet shy type.

This is really good you should continue somehow.

Chould you add a OC named Jessica Marie Jones in Outlaw Star that have the blood of a Ctrl the is in love with Jim and thay have the room together becase ther are no more rooms for her so they have a room together and they talk and stuff.

Could you do a threesome where Jim is with Jessica Marie Jones and Ashia in a lemon stories?

love the story
and you have got to love the hentainess that is the hotspring epp
the sceen where Ashia is in the lava is just too funny
jim and Ashia are reallu cute together

that was fairly good, but i would remove the inserted ston thn the middle since most people are probably reading for the jim and aisha.

Great story please continue
Thanks For Reading

OMG! this was a great story, foucusing on things that I would have not expected, but enjoyed. Please make another chapter.

Hey that was great make another one make another one I want more Jim and Ashia Please more Ashia and Jim maybe having Ashia and Jim in a BDSM with Ashia as the master and Jim as theve. ve. That would make a great story sadly however I do not have the talent to write lemons like you do please write a story as a request from a great Lemon Fiend. I need lemons to live*evil laugh* Not really I couldn\'t back that up. But isn\'t it interesting that I would rather have you write this lemon than do it myself? No not really. I just love doing those Dr.Evil things*evil pose* I can\'t write lemons *cries* they sound so flat and dull unlike you who brought it to life*evil laugh* Laugh with me Laugh with me writers of the world. Okay sorry about that. Anywho I would really really like it if you would write a BDSM with Ashia as the Master and Jim as the slave. Keep up the good work.