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nice story
r u gonna continue

awww that story was so sweet =)

*rolls around on the floor* BWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!!! *tears streaming out of eyes*

OH MY GOD THAT WAS GREAT! *more rolling around on the floor*

BWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAAA!!!!

*ahem* I especially loved the war-inside bit. It was GREAT! (GO HOROMONES!)

Usually I find Pikachu a yellow rat that deserves to die, but in this story I find his(or is it a her? >.<) reactions to Gary and Ash quite refreshing AND HILARIOUS AS HELL!!!!!

*resumes rolling on the floor in fits of laughter*

Always Update!

Ja!

lol. i love the brain heart hormone etc. thing. \"gyah! talk talk, this isnt opera, lets fuck god dammit\". i love it!!

This was an interesting and romantic story. I\'m glad that Ash and Gary got together, they do make a beautiful couple. Anyways you have to write out chapter 2 real soon, because I\'m anxious to finish reading it.

That was good.. LOL the main highlight of the day was the narratar. GOod old him. Still there

Hey there i like the story a lot. hmmmm Ash and Gary together, makes a cute couple. What a way to accept a apology hehehe.......Angel

This fic was okay. I\'ve definitly read better. I think that the whole way with the IM conversation is confusing, it\'s a kind of wierd way to write. The smut scene was pretty good, but it would have been better if it hadn\'t been all through a conversation. Both Gary and Ash were terribly OoC, Gary would NEVER come up to Ash and admit he was an asshole. That is definitly not how things work. This was a good attempt, but I would highly suggest writing in prose from now on. It\'s much easier for people to understand.

::is laughing really hard:: I luv this! please write more!