rate_review Reviews

This is a really good fanfic! I have to admit I only flew over most of the Omi/Ken parts, that were not plot-relevant. But I loved the way you built up the story and chracterized the charcters. I especially loved the scenes at the \"final fantasy\". What I didn\'t like was the schizo you gave Aya in the later chapters, and the way Youji reacts to it and narrows down Aya to \"Ran\", ignoring the Aya part, and in fact using it against Aya. In fact I really didn\'t like any of the distinction between \"Aya\" and \"Ran\". It makes the character seem too schizo for my liking.
On the other hand I really loved how you generated the tension between Aya and Youji, outlining how complicated things between those two are. Also I liked that the characters were behaving somewhat realistic most of the time.
Overall a very good story! <3

Your description of Yohji\'s room made me think a lot of how Drew\'s half of our room looked...

Tease... BUt I still love this stroy, and can\'t wait to see more. Keep up the good work

Yay! Another great chapter, I love. They\'re finally together!!!1 I liked how you built everything up to that moment, great job as usual. Update soon ^^

Okay, I love this story. IT HAS -PLOT-! Don\'t be discouraged if people don\'t review, I don\'t see people review much on here. If you want reviews, I suggest you post this on fanfiction.net but tone-down the sex parts (they only except R-rated matieral) But this story is probably one of the best I\'ve read on here. It\'s not the usual PWP, which gets very annoying, I like plot. And lemon too ,of course, but building up to it is always nice, no? It makes you feel like you -know- the characters. But that\'s just my stupid thoughts. I\'ve only read up to this chapter I\'m reviewing on, but I saw your A/N note and thought I should tell you what I think. IT\'S AWESOME, DON\'T STOP/BE DISCOURAGED! ^^\' I lub K/O, A/Y. You detail everything perfectly, and the lemon... 0_0 Woah. Lol. You kept it going for like 5-6 chapters? @.@; ::bows to teh master:: Um, again good work, I love.
P.S.: If anyone gives you crap that they don\'t like it (I haven\'t read the reviews so I dunno), but tell \'em to screw off. It\'s your idea and your alone, if they don\'t like it, Don\'t R-E-A-D. XD\' I\'ll stop my ranting/bitching/nice/long comment.

I totally adore you for this fanfiction. It\'s brillant.
Since I\'m from Germany and my native language isn\'t
english, I\'ll leave it with those words.
I don\'t want to confuse anyone.

Still waiting for more

Again you have posted a wonderful chapter. The story is developing very nicely. Keep up the good work.

(((((((((((Omi)))))))))))) Oh he is just adorable in chapter 8. Slighty wicked and teasing with that wide eyed innocence layered over the top....precious beyond words! Ken is getting his equal share of hotness as well...GO KEN!!!

Omi as the seducer? Oh I loved it! The hand under the table was perfect. You described it so well I could picture it clearly...Go Me!...Heh. They are so sweet together, and hot. Although when Aya and Youji tangle in the sheets I will try and not to spontaneously combust. I love it so far.

Chapter 10.....Chibi sex! Hurrah! Aya and Yohji\'s clubbing gear....OMG......Drooool! Yohji would be amused by the sounds coming from next door...Heh. Go Ken..Make Omi scream! (with pleasure that is)