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January 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Heeeeeyyyyyyy.... That qwas aery cool capter. You\'re right: it\'s much clearer now. But something I don\'t really nderstand yet is: Does Eiri (Yuki) love Shuichi nw or not? Maybe it will be clear in the next chapter? Anyway: I think Eris \"dark-side\" is very sexy, through I hopre he won\'t hurt Shuichi. I\'m really excited about how it goes along. Please update soon!!!!!!!
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December 29, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I think your story takes a strange turn. But it\'s still cool. I hope Yuki and Shuichi are stillv getting together. Anyway: update soon please
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December 27, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Get. A. Beta. I cannot stress this enough. Seriously. I understand completely how difficult it can be to write in a foriegn language, but if you\'re going to write something and post it on the internet, RUN IT BY A FEW NATIVE SPEAKERS FIRST. That way, your English will improve and your story will read much more smoothly.
Hell, even if you\'re writing a story in your native language, get a beta. Everyone should have one. It would make fanfiction sites a hell of a lot less painful to sift through.
Hell, even if you\'re writing a story in your native language, get a beta. Everyone should have one. It would make fanfiction sites a hell of a lot less painful to sift through.
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December 27, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I liked the first chap (the only I have read so far) Its certainly a different concept... I\'ll be reading the next chappys and reviewigf them. I have a question though... why did you make Shu and Ryu brothers? I mean, there will be no hot sex between them? Aw that sucks... other than that Its all good^O~
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December 27, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Great chapter!!!
lol When i said i prefer Taki/Shu i meant that if Taki should harrass someone it should be Shuichi not Ryuichi
But i mostly hate Taki too even though there is one Taki/Shu story i like but there the rape never happened.
lol When i said i prefer Taki/Shu i meant that if Taki should harrass someone it should be Shuichi not Ryuichi
But i mostly hate Taki too even though there is one Taki/Shu story i like but there the rape never happened.
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December 27, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Oh by the way about the pairings in Yami no Matsuei I really don\'t like the idea of Tatsumi with Tsuzuki
Now the idea of Muraki harrassing Tsuzuki sounds great but Tsuzuki returning his feelings is horrible i mean after all the things he\'s done! honestly the only pairing i like there is Tsuzuki/Hisoka which in gravi style really resembles Shichi(Tsuzuki)/Yuki(Hisoka) only Yuki would be the uke...
Now the idea of Muraki harrassing Tsuzuki sounds great but Tsuzuki returning his feelings is horrible i mean after all the things he\'s done! honestly the only pairing i like there is Tsuzuki/Hisoka which in gravi style really resembles Shichi(Tsuzuki)/Yuki(Hisoka) only Yuki would be the uke...
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December 13, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Tht was a reeaallyy col chapter. I like the crossover with YnM. It\'s a pity that Eiri ans Shuichi aren\'t \"really\" together yet, but this way it\'s more exciting. Pleeaaasseee write more soon.
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December 13, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I think it\'s totaly cool that Taki and Tathsua are fighting for Ryuichi. That\'s funny (a little bit). So I hope you update soon cause I\'m really excited abou how it goes along. I hope Taki looses (cause he\'s such an ass)!! So, anyway, I looovvee it.
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December 13, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I\'m really happy about the 8th chapter!! It\'s pretty cool, the fight and that stuff. I hope Shuichi and Eiri will be together soon. I would be a shae if Eiri wouldn\'t fall in love with him. It was also a funny chapter. The part were Shuichi cried so much is cool cause he emberasses Eiri so much (but he\'s a poor Shu-chan, Eiri always makes him cry). So write more and update quickly. Please!!1
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December 13, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Yay Yami no matsuei!! Hisoka!
I see how Taki feels about Ryu but i\'m a little confused about his intentions torwards Shuichi, i personally like Shu/Taki much more than Ryu/Taki.
I see how Taki feels about Ryu but i\'m a little confused about his intentions torwards Shuichi, i personally like Shu/Taki much more than Ryu/Taki.