rate_review Reviews

Chapter 12 pretty much sucked. It didn\'t feel realistic at all. Mana wouldn\'t \"come home\" like that for any reason at all if she had any common senseor consideration, not to mention some other things that were quirky.* Basically this chapter felt contrived in ways, and also, the sex scene was extremely lacking. You could have put more effort into it considering that it\'s the reason you post these on AFF. To top it off, the ending felt gimmicky and predictably unpredictable (if you know what I mean), like it was done purely for \"shock\" value (being that normally such an occurrence as happened in this chapter\'s ending would not be the case in any reality). The plot concept in this chapter is more fitting for something of a longer composition, a multi-chapter spin-off perhaps. You tried to cram way too many feelings, half-developed idea, and other things into a short chapter. It just didn\'t work this time around.


*For example, no matter how hard you study it takes longer than 3 years to become a doctor of any sort, medical or otherwise.

omg! continue the last chapter! >.<

this is flatley amazing i hope you continue i realy hope you make another mana chapter that isnt sad bolth of her apperences have been followed by tragey.

But.. Rei, like Asuka etc. gets a second chapter, doesn\'t she?

>:D

Wow. You are possibly the only writer I\'ve ever seen that can write a sad fic that I can enjoy. That you\'re a lemon writer makes it even more amazing. Please don\'t stop writing, that would be a true tragedy.

The Rei story was incredible.

Wow is all i can say, S/R is my favorite pairing and this chapter did do it justice. While i would have loved a happy ending, the way you chose to end it was very emotional and I hope you do more S/R fics in the future.

I really like these stories strictly because they are so unique and there are plenty of ACCs for ppl like me who love them. Then you also have other characters who were actually in the series, which gives it more realism. This is honestly, one of the better fanfics out there. I dislike Shinji x Asuka, but you made me at least read it, you get alot points for that story as well, keep on updating!

GOOD, GREAT, EXCELLENT, BUT WHERE IS REI?

All these chapters and your ACCs are great, unbelieveably good work, they are real works of art... But...... But.....


*chanting* GIVE US REI! GIVE US REI! GIVE US REI! GIVE US REI! GIVE US REI! GIVE US REI! GIVE US REI! GIVE US REI!