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by Marlingrl

person Peacemaker
schedule May 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Another two great chapters, Keep up the good work because I like this story a lot. Please update when you have time.
person omega arts
schedule May 3, 2005 at 12:00 AM
oh my god! did he actually kill?? such big twists of please update soon!!
person InuMiko
schedule March 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ugh.

How could you do that to Kenshin?

Ugh.

It\'s well written, but I can\'t stand it... horrible, horrible, horrible.
person Lin
schedule March 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
The best one so far... now I really want them to end up together.

And I see my beloved Lere is also reviewing you. It\'s like old
home room... I should have come over here ages ago. Sessha
begs your humble pardon for not partaking of your talent before.



Tsuki-san
person Lin
schedule March 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
YEEECH! How did I know that was going to happen?
Not nice, not nice... but at least I don\'t have to wait
for the update... he he he he he

I know, I know... You\'ll get me later.

Tsuki
person Lin
schedule March 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Old Friends........

What a bastard! That\'s all I have to say.
person Lin
schedule March 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Alas... so I have reached the end....... it is grievous...
update... (I know.. I\'m a good one to talk)

Respectfully,
Tsuki-san
person Lin
schedule March 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Okay... I have to stop and drop a review... I couldn\'t break away until now.
This is wicked and... different isn\'t the word. This is... painful, but, oh what
a way to go. I can\'t stop. I can see I\'m going to have to read the whole thing.
I didn\'t have anything else planned.

Another word of advice... watch out for repeating words in sentence groups.
You don\'t do it very often, but it is there. Also, you really should seperate
you dialogue. Each character is supposed to have their own paragraph when
speaking. Proper structure allows for only one character to speak within one
paragraph at a time... even if it is only one sentence or phrase. This is a rule
of grammar... not a bitchy old woman. :)

God Bless...
Tsuki-san
Off to read more......poof
person Lin
schedule March 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Kewlness... Dana (Sephiress) already told you about the dialogue thing...
I should have known... she\'s the best, isn\'t she? She\'s one of my babies. Love that
girl.

Great chappie!! The whole this is breaking my heart... I have a horrible thing to admit...
I am actually wanting Kenshin and Miorya (sp?) to end up together... shhhhhhhhhhh,
don\'t tell anybody... I think I\'d get assassinated.

Love you, girly
Tsuki-san
person redtatsu
schedule March 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow, you really got me hooked on this. When is the next update? Wonderfull story. Love how you torture Kenshin.

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