rate_review Reviews

you have a beautiful story and i will wait anxiously til your next update. :)

This is great! Can\'t wait to read the rest of the story!

This is the best fanfic i have ever read. Period. It is gritty, and dark, but keeps to the personality of the charachters perfectly. I LOVE your writing style, and I cant wait for the next chapter. Kenshin is such a tortured soul, i really hope he can find happiness with Kaoru. We alll love them so much! Keep up the good work!

I am loving this story so much! I can\'t wait to read more! ^_^

Dear Marlingrl,

I\'m enjoying reading this. The description of the chamber where Kenshin and Miyori are being held has a parallel in the Three Musketeers - did you intend that? I will be interested in seeing where this is going - some sort of \"breeding program\" perhaps?
As for your comments on my own work at FF.net, yes, I indeed am old enough to read this sort of fiction. Hell, I remember when Robert Redford didn\'t have any wrinkles! (Ha!) Take care and keep writing!

Mauzkateer Aka Jay R.

I am LOVING this fic! I haven\'t checked it in such a long time, and then I saw that you had updated...I have no idea what\'s going on with everyone else at AFF, but I for one think that this is a WONDERFUL, FANTASTIC, BEAUTIFULLY WRITTEN fanfic, and I can\'t wait for more! Oh, but I kind of like Miyori and hope that things work out for her (I wouldn\'t mund Kenshin and her-Miss Kaoru gets on my daggone nerves most of the time)...PLEASE WRITE MORE!!!

Chapter 4 review

*claps* Much better with the transitions and paragraphing. The story seemed to flow much better now. There were still one or two places I could see for improvement, like the scene in which Misao and Aoshi randomly popped up. Perhaps a different form of entrance or something, but I\'m not too worried because that\'s a difficult process at times. So good job with that.

I also noticed that you no longer put more then one person\'s dialogue in one paragraph. I had seen that a few times in the last chapter, and hardley at all in here, so good job with that.

And alas, the villian\'s motive is finally revealed! And our dear Ken has caught them in their watching. I can\'t wait to see what you do next and Ken/Miyori\'s reaction to their watching.

Sephiress

Trust me, you can keep on writing.

will this ever have a chance of turning into a k&k? :) just asking...

I don\'t really understand the point- during chapters 3-5, the plot hasn\'t really moved forward at all. Kaoru makes it home, but we are given no information on the people who took her away, and the excuses given by the masked man to Kenshin don\'t make sense- it seems like a pretty contrived situation. I guess they suffer from \"Dr. Evil Syndrome\" namely, unnecessarily complicating events.