rate_review Reviews

good fic but the format should be changed. it makes it a bit difficult to read. good story though

This was different from the usual run, but it was very intense. It was another take on the relationship between D and Leon, and it was very interesting.

Woo-hoo for alternate language speech set ups. Makes me miss my high school days of French class.

Anyway, I thought your story was great! Very cute, and /very/ painful. Considering English isn\'t your first language makes it all the better. I\'ll admit that some of your sentances are a bit \"stiff\" in structure, but overall your spelling is on target, and you most definitely got your points across. To help deal with the \"stiff\" sentances I\'d suggest a nice beta reader, that way you can learn from what they tell you and soon enough you won\'t have any more \"stiff\" sentances.

I felt so awful for D in this fic! He needs to have a revenge fic! That would be sweet. :) Mwahahaha! I can picture it now, silly Leon being forced to withstand hours and hours of sexual torture. (If something sexual can even be considered torture.) And of course we the audience can just sit in satisfaction knowing that our boys will be released eventually. (Or maybe they won\'t be released ... hee hee.)

good job. I hope you write a sequel where it is d\'s turn to be on top. *evil grin*

Your grammar needs work.

HAHAHAHAHAHAHA....his pewee hurts.......(rolls over laughing).
This is an interesting story! It\'s the first time I\'ve ever heard of D taking a dildo......HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!

I think your penname says it all, I`m breathless right now. Thank you.