rate_review Reviews

It was a little weird at first, but pretty good story all the same, you wrote it very well.

Overall it was a okay read. There were several things that were getting to me, like the frequent use of \'Lina-in-Nahga\' and how fast the story moved at points, expecially the introduction of the monster in the first chapter, I was left trying to figure out what was going on because the author moved things too quickly. The whole fashback set of scenes could definately use some slowing down and more detail, I ended up skimming them because there were just too many too fast. The fic did have some good points though, it was definately in the relm of origionality which is always a good thing, interesting use of spells and the begining part is probably the best written and rationalized.