rate_review Reviews

Wow... This was beautifully written. Very few grammar mistakes, I would never have thought you were not a native English speaker! You have a wonderful way with words. I absolutely love this. Wonderful job!

You're right; your grammar and spelling are both awful. However, the story was excellent. About your first a/n, though. You do realize this is an ADULT site, don't you? thus, there should be no 13-14 year-olds writing stories on it.

after reading a few of your stories, i have come to the conclusion that you have recieved too little recognition for your work and for an author of your caliber.

my mission: read all rk fics i find interesting... if an author has talent, if that author can paint emotions, worlds, and people with his/her words, i bookmark their profile page into a file labeled "MASTERS"... master artists... like: van gogh, monet, da vinci, rockwell, picasso, dali, matisse, o'keeffe, rubens, lautrec, etc... every one different, unique, amazing! you are now numbered among them.

sincerely,
ginny

Wow, that was a great fic. Aside from a few spelling errors, (which are to be expected.) it was a perfect fanfiction. I really liked it. As for those who flame...dont even listen to them. They wouldnt know good writing if it came and bit them in the ass. Most people, native speaking or not mess up in the english language. It's the freakiest language I have yet to speak, and I was born with it. lol. Too many changes, so dont criticize yourself too harshly, if at all, and dont listen to people who flame. Keep up the good work, and I look forward to reading more from you. You are an exceptionally talented author. Good Job!! ^_^

~Minna-chan

This...is...beautiful. I don\'t think there was a single error in this fanfic, and if I said so before, disregard it. I\'d love to read anymore of your work; it\'s that good. Sayonara(and don\'t give up)!

PunkeeMonkee

This story is awesome. You put so much into it, and I can really tell every time I read it. I love the romance and slight comedy mixture; you use the components well. This is an excellent piece of work. Kudos to you, and I hope to read more from you soon!! ^__^

its a very sweet story. maybe not the best lemon, but it fills you WAFF. thats a compliment. =)

Actually, I think that story was wonderful! All I have to say is WOW! O_O LOL Don\'t let that *obviously* bad flamer get to you...you have a very good grasp of the English language, with very little mistakes! And even those of us who are native English speakers make mistakes! Most flamers just like to read a story and review it saying, \"You suck!\", or \"the characters are OOC\" *out of character* when they don\'t even know that much about them, etc. My second language is French, which I need to practice more...I haven\'t actually had the time to write any fanfics, but when I do...hopefully I\'ll come across more of your stories! ^___^

beautiful, just beautiful. awesome job, i would have never thought that u\'r native tongue wasn\'t english (well maybe i should have, u right way better that i). lol. i totally agree w/ u on the flamer-thing. if ur gonna flame let it be construtive, and on the work, not the person. it\'s not their fault you read it.

I\'m going to do my best to give you a thoughtful and constructive review. The story was wonderful. There were several parts that gave me tingles. Kenshin\'s dialogue was superb. You gave him these amazing one-liners that, with the help of your excellent description and diction, made butterflies flutter in my stomache. I realize that\'s an odd and slightly cheesy explanation, but I think it\'s the best way of conveying my reaction without getting too poetic. Concerning your grammar, admittedly there were a few problems, but only a few. I\'m actually very impressed with the level at which you\'re writing. I study writing and foreign languages so I know how hard it is to learn to speak fluently. There are little stylistic techniques and contextual meanings that you just don\'t learn unless you\'re completely immersed within the culture. However, to be perfectly honest, I think you\'ve made a wise decision in ignoring other people\'s complaints about your grammar. It\'s obviously leagues better than a lot of other authors... despite the fact that English is their first language. I tutor people in writing, and I work as an editor. Believe me; I\'ve seen some truling appalling work.

However, some of the spelling errors were a bit distracting. I don\'t blame you for this at all, and I\'m definitely not criticizing you. I\'m sure I\'ve made a few typos in this review, typos that I will not hunt down and correct. Instead, I\'m just going to point out a few words for future reference. I\'ll use the following format: misspelled word=correctly spelled word. Taunt=taut. The word \"taunt\" means to tease or insult, while \"taut\" could be used to describes Kenshin\'s skin. Lob=lobe. Lob is actually a verb that means to toss or throw. Lobe is the part of the ear that Kenshin would want to nibble on. At first I thought that you just made a couple typing errors, but then I noticed that you had spelled each of them incorrectly more than once. I really hope you aren\'t offended by me pointing this out to you. I\'m just trying to be helpful.

Okay, I\'m sick of discussing inconsequential details. Let\'s actually talk about the story, which I feel is something that not enough reviewers do. Your descriptions are wonderful and you have an excellent vocabulary. One phrase that I really liked was \"a dozen seconds later.\" Using the word dozen makes the sentence richer and more interesting. Your opening was beautiful but a bit overboard; I became bored with some of the description, which seemed borderline redundant. I realize you were setting the mood for your story, but you did a much better job of this once Kenshin was introduced. Basically, all I\'m saying is that the beginning lost my interest.

A part that deserves a lot of praise is the scene you create when Kenshin first lays eyes on Kaoru. The way the lightning illuminates her just long enough for him to catch an erotic glimpse, his reaction to her actions, the building of tension with each time he sees... it was all amazing. I believe that you said that you were centering the plot on the reactions of the characters. In that respect, you definitely succeeded. All of the events were so vivid; I could see the whole story unfolding in my mind. Your attention to detail is wonderful.

I especially love the way you\'re able to make a seemingly simple plot come alive with your talents in characterization; Kenshin was expressed superbly. Kaoru didn\'t show as much depth, but that\'s not a flaw in the story. The plot was built around Kenshin, and besides, Kaoru was caught up in a passionate frenzy. However, you did give her dimension by dealing with the notion of worthiness.

This review has become a lot longer than I intended. I hope that it helps in some way, even though I had only a couple minor criticisms. At the very least, my praise tells you what you\'re doing right. All in all, excellent fic. I vastly enjoyed it and look forward to reading more of your work.