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I absolutely loved this, it was the absolute best scryed yaoi i have ever read in my entire life, which in actually isnt saying much for my life. But anyhoo, please you have either got to hurry and update or come up with something similar soon...very soon. Anyhoo, keep up the good work and update soon

TaTa

hi ive been re reading this for ages and i just wanna say that ur story is great and i hope u write another

Your story is absolutely amazing, I just can\'t get enough. The \'Explicit\' scenes were wonderful, this is truly one of the best fanfics I\'ve ever read. ^_^ In my oppinion, it would be great in moving picture form. ^_^ Well, keep up the good work and please continue! And update as soon as you can, but take your time, great work comes from organized thoughts, not rushed ideas. Well, until then, Bye! ^_^

Thank you! I was scared that you gave it up, this is one of the best Kazu/Ryu I have seen. Finally, it happened! What did Kazu say? I have a feeling it was a declaration of somekind!! I hope, well don\'t make us wait so long next time, I had to back up a chap to remember where we were.

Hot! OMG, so HOT! And very worth the wait. Take that all you nay-saying Mary Sues, flammers and assorted other wackos. Oooo baby, I gotta stop reading this stuff at work.

Whew, anyway, is it possible this might tie in with Newlyweds somehow? Obviously they are actually having feelings for each other, if Kazuma\'s little mutterings are any gauge, hee he. Geeze, where do they go from here? They got these unacknowledged feelings just buzzing about, I envision angst ahead. And more hot smut, lots of smut. Just a thought. That would be cool, rather a prequel kind of thing.

But then there\'s Tachibana, pardon my spelling. Oh man, how\'s he gonna react to all this? But then he kind of sensed the sexual tension between these two anyway, right?

I didn\'t notice too many typos, a few scattered here and there, but nothing the took away from the \"plot\", so to speak.

Ok, I\'ve rambled on enough. Need to get some actual work done.

Great, fantastic, wonderful job as always!

Man! I thought you\'d never update! but it was totally worth it. I love this chapter, especially the scene with Ryuho getting \"ready\". I hope you update soon enough, because my dirty mind can\'t stop picturing a threesome=^_~= Love it - Love you! along with your Newlyweds, those two are my favorite scryed fanfics ever. O.O

Oh my goodness! I just about died when I saw you had updated! This is my most utterly favourite story on AFF, and I\'ve been waiting for this sex for so long! SO SO SO worth the wait, this is just....no words can describe. There\'s something about the way you write Kazuma and Ryuhou that\'s so raw and passionate. I love your descriptions, I love your characterizations; I simply love your writing style. Was too distracted to pick up any errors whatsoever.

And so finally their first time! I could not have wished for anything better! That was simply perfect in every way. And the mushiness at the end....adorable. I hope to see your next chapter some time in the near future. Also hoping to see the return of Tachibana some time; I love that guy. ^^

Keep on writing! <3 Yaoi Scryed fics have got to overpower all the icky herero! XP

*squeeeeee* And now I dissolve into a gibbering fangirl mess.

*bows and worships and licks your toes*

Generally I enjoy this story a lot and look foreward to the next chapter, however there is one little thing that bothers me about the sex scenes in the recent chapters, namely your assertion that anal sex is going to hurt significantly the first time no matter what. I\'ve read multiple resources on the subject of anal sex, and every one of them stated that it should not hurt and there should not be tearing even the first time as long as you\'re careful and patient about it; my own experimentation with dildos (still a virgin here; oh, and female btw) seems to back this assertion up. Inserting one lubed finger would definitely not hurt unless Ryuuhou was completely tensed up at the time.

Mind you that I\'m not saying that Kazuma and Ryuuhou\'s first time wouldn\'t involve pain, since as far as I can tell neither of them are careful or patient, but...well... it was just that the message that no matter what, it\'ll hurt bothered me.

Other than that I love the fic.

Konnichiwa!
Hrm, I like this story so far, so I am pleased to say that I will continue reading it. I must point out the many mistakes this chapter holds at this point. A generous amount of grammatical, as well as puncuation errors are evident here, although spelling is alright. I\'d encourage an editor, or reading over your work a few times before you post.

Also, your paragraphs are a bit too long. There are about three breaking points in each of your paragraphs where you needed to- well, break them up. =D I\'m not picing on you, these are just grammar and writing rules. You can trust me, I\'m very advanced when it comes to English (Language Arts).

Hrm, there was something else, but I might concern it in the next review I post, or maybe not.

Just to give you a head\'s up, I will not review every chapter, only every five or so unless I feel the need to specifically point something out, be it good or bad. If chapter seven (I believe this story has seven chapters if I recall correctly) is the last chapter, I will review that one. If not, I will wait until chapter 10, or if the last chapter comes before then. (Lucky you, I usually don\'t start reviewing until chapter five!)

Well, my friend, it is almost 6:00AM here, and I\'ve got to go to bed! I\'ll read the rest of your chapters later on today.
-Youkai Dreams

PS- Sorry that this isn\'t super encouraging. I have a habit of pointing out mistakes just so authors know what they did wrong. But just to let you know, I really did like this chapter overall. Ja