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July 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This is honestly one of the best fanfics I have ever read regarding any anime. It is beautifully written and honestly keeps me on the edge of my seat. Throwing in some other subjects in it is genious. PLEASE UPDATE!
I can't wait for more!
I can't wait for more!
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February 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Whoa good story you should continue its great i can't wait to read what happens.
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January 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
THis is really good, can you do more?
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August 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Very good so far! This story shows a lot of promise. It seems quite interesting.
So much, in fact, that I did a search for some of these clans you\'ve mentioned, and have thus discovered the \"Vampires: The Masquerade\" game. With my great interest in these blood-sucking fiends, it seems like the kind of game I might enjoy. Well, I\'d probably enjoy the table-top RPG as well, but I\'ve never really done any since I can\'t gather up a group of people to play them with me. At least not regularly enough to make it worthwhile. I\'m currently considering getting the PC game, but if I do decide to get it, I\'m afraid it will have to wait since I am severely low on funds. Bah.
Just so you know, it\'s all your fault! ;)
So much, in fact, that I did a search for some of these clans you\'ve mentioned, and have thus discovered the \"Vampires: The Masquerade\" game. With my great interest in these blood-sucking fiends, it seems like the kind of game I might enjoy. Well, I\'d probably enjoy the table-top RPG as well, but I\'ve never really done any since I can\'t gather up a group of people to play them with me. At least not regularly enough to make it worthwhile. I\'m currently considering getting the PC game, but if I do decide to get it, I\'m afraid it will have to wait since I am severely low on funds. Bah.
Just so you know, it\'s all your fault! ;)
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July 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
@_@ Just cut us off at the knees! >.< Ah, well, anyhoo, its good so far, I hope that you update it soon. It will be fun to see if Alucard can ever get Seras whipped ( no pun intended ) into shape so she can mingle with the elite of vampire society properly. I eagerly await your update! Until next time! ^_^
PS sorry if I\'ve read and posted a review before. I lost a lot of Fave. links while formatting my compurter and I can\'t remember if I had R&R-ed before. Anyhoo...^_^
PS sorry if I\'ve read and posted a review before. I lost a lot of Fave. links while formatting my compurter and I can\'t remember if I had R&R-ed before. Anyhoo...^_^
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July 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
5/5 editing
4/5 story
4/5 Non-Out Of character
1/1 bonus The Malcavians! (my fav clan)
Notes: Can\'t wait for the rest, this is a very promesing story
4/5 story
4/5 Non-Out Of character
1/1 bonus The Malcavians! (my fav clan)
Notes: Can\'t wait for the rest, this is a very promesing story
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July 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This story shows a great deal of promise! The characters appear colourful, playful, and thoroughly compelling!
And thank you for taking your time. I really enjoyed the Camarilla explanation, and the gathering relationship between Alucard and Seras. I wonder: is this going to be an AxS fic? Not to prod, but I absolutely love AxS, and Social Suicide seems to possess the apparently rare potential for a great and wonderful exploration into each of them (some of your phrases - such as \"Alucard recalled a time when he had doted on his childer [...] He refused to let Seras turn out the same way.\" - impressed in me the idea that Alucard has a more sincere affection for his police girl than he wishes to exhibit, and that perhaps the presence of these phrases suggest that you, yourself have an affinity for that affection).
As for your structure; I truly love the dialogue. Personally, my absolute favourite line is \"The Malkavians are the mad vampires, and I do so enjoy a conversation with them in that it is engaging trying to decipher what the hell it is they are talking about.\" This is rich text that suits the characters, but the story seems to require a bit more description in the narrative. Give your audience more a picture when you describe scenery and whatnot (and I concede that since the first few chapters are introduction to the story, this method isn\'t so crucial; but I advice looking to it for future chapters).
Second, there are a few grammar mistakes present (although a miraculous few during my first read-through, so no worries: I\'m just mentioning it for posterity).
And finally... please, PLEASE make the chapters a bit longer!
Anyway, my fingers are getting sore, so I\'ll leave you on one final note: I don\'t want to intimidate you. I want this story to be the best it can be, and so I choose to bounce ideas off my fellow fanfic authors.
Thanks for listen, lol!
P.S. I just had a thought (if you\'re open for fan-feedback - I know most authors have planned-out plots): perhaps Seras becomes a very big hit in the Camarilla. Wouldn\'t that just be incredible? Poor Seras fending off \"young\" vampire nobles whilst a jealous and angry Alucard broods and plots!
And thank you for taking your time. I really enjoyed the Camarilla explanation, and the gathering relationship between Alucard and Seras. I wonder: is this going to be an AxS fic? Not to prod, but I absolutely love AxS, and Social Suicide seems to possess the apparently rare potential for a great and wonderful exploration into each of them (some of your phrases - such as \"Alucard recalled a time when he had doted on his childer [...] He refused to let Seras turn out the same way.\" - impressed in me the idea that Alucard has a more sincere affection for his police girl than he wishes to exhibit, and that perhaps the presence of these phrases suggest that you, yourself have an affinity for that affection).
As for your structure; I truly love the dialogue. Personally, my absolute favourite line is \"The Malkavians are the mad vampires, and I do so enjoy a conversation with them in that it is engaging trying to decipher what the hell it is they are talking about.\" This is rich text that suits the characters, but the story seems to require a bit more description in the narrative. Give your audience more a picture when you describe scenery and whatnot (and I concede that since the first few chapters are introduction to the story, this method isn\'t so crucial; but I advice looking to it for future chapters).
Second, there are a few grammar mistakes present (although a miraculous few during my first read-through, so no worries: I\'m just mentioning it for posterity).
And finally... please, PLEASE make the chapters a bit longer!
Anyway, my fingers are getting sore, so I\'ll leave you on one final note: I don\'t want to intimidate you. I want this story to be the best it can be, and so I choose to bounce ideas off my fellow fanfic authors.
Thanks for listen, lol!
P.S. I just had a thought (if you\'re open for fan-feedback - I know most authors have planned-out plots): perhaps Seras becomes a very big hit in the Camarilla. Wouldn\'t that just be incredible? Poor Seras fending off \"young\" vampire nobles whilst a jealous and angry Alucard broods and plots!
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July 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This story is awesome. I wish I had something better to say. Or more original, at least. >.< You rock, tho. I mean it. Keep writing, I\'ll be cheering. (Oy, that sounded do cheesy.) ^.^ XOXO
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July 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Mm, I love it. Please write more! (You rock, *squeeeee*!) ^.^
I\'ll be waiting!
I\'ll be waiting!
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June 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
one word: more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more *breathe* more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more ok i think you get the point plz update soon!!!!!!!
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