rate_review Reviews

The story has an interesting plotline, and the characters are pretty muc IC, but you need to lengthen it. It seems like you sre just glossing over. Go into more detail. With how much happens from the beginning to the end, it should be at least a couple chapters long. Shuichi wouldnn\'t get over Yuki that quickly. An offer to have sex the day after he was dumped would get turned down with a slap and tears, this being Shuichi.

Cute.

PIKACHU GODDESS
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Ok first I\'ll start out with I like this idea, but if you don\'t mind I\'d like to give you a little advice to help your writing. The first part of it was written just fine with no major errors, and worked well until the sex scene. I think you rushed it just a little. I think it would be a little better if you were to add a little foreplay in there and describe maybe the emotions on their faces. Maybe add some playfulness since Ryuichi and Shuichi both are energetic guys. Anyway, kudos to you on writing a pairing that doesn\'t get much love. I hope to read more of your stuff.

I like your pen name. Or are you the REAL shuichi shindo? LoL. I actually met him once...Shuichi\'s seiyuu. He was awesome. He drew me a picture of Shuichi and gave me his autograph and he was nice. ^_^

I have a neopets account too! Tho, I\'ve been neglecting it lately...I need to get back into the swing of things...bah..ive been too busy..

::Squeals and bounces around:: AWWWWWW! That was SO cute! I really really liked it and hope u write more RyuXSHu fics. THere aren\'t enough of them out there! U ROCK!