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February 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
(Ch. 3)
Much better. Wonderful chapter.
Really wonderful chapter.
I\'m glad you didn\'t add a lemon. Gahhh! I can\'t WAIT to see both Shu\'s and Eiri\'s reasction when they discover the truth!
Ha!
Until the next,
Ja ne~
Much better. Wonderful chapter.
Really wonderful chapter.
I\'m glad you didn\'t add a lemon. Gahhh! I can\'t WAIT to see both Shu\'s and Eiri\'s reasction when they discover the truth!
Ha!
Until the next,
Ja ne~
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February 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Yet another beautiful chapter. I\'m glad that you waited to put the lemons in. It makes it that much more interesting. Again, I would be more than happy to beta for you. Just email me whenever you\'re ready... ^_^ Keep up the good work. I just love this fic.
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February 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I am sorry about your cold. Hope it get better for you.Oh,and I like this chapter it was good very good.So when every can do another. When you finish your school stuff and other stuff,please.Good job.^-^
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January 31, 2005 at 12:00 AM
wah! Poor Shuichi!! I can\'t wait to see if Tohma\'s plan backfires in his face. Update update!!
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January 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
oooOOooo, I want to know what Eiri\'s reaction is when he see\'s Shuichi. But that was kind of mean of Tohma to say that to Eiri, mean for Shuichi that is. Well, other than that your spelling is much better, and I hope to read the next chapter very soon^^ Keep up the good work^__^!!!!
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January 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
(Ch. 2)
Such a wonderful idea, such an evil Tohma.
But I think you need a beta. Do you have one?
Wonderful chapter. Really.
All you need is someone to proof-read your chapters before you post. I think that will help a lot.
Awaiting the next chapter,
Ja ne~
Such a wonderful idea, such an evil Tohma.
But I think you need a beta. Do you have one?
Wonderful chapter. Really.
All you need is someone to proof-read your chapters before you post. I think that will help a lot.
Awaiting the next chapter,
Ja ne~
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January 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I don\'t have any problems with description whatsoever while reading your story. I think it\'s just fine. Though...putting the page the way you did, shows ..^_^\" You didn\'t write all that much. All I\'d say is...try to either write more in your chapters, or speed up the pace. I mean, your summary says lemon, I think your reviewers want lemon. XD
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January 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
OMG!!!! This is such a good story! I am like at the edge of my seat here. Please update soon it is sooo~ GOOD!!!!!!! I can\'t wait until the next chapter keep up the GREAT work!
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January 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Oh you\'re doing so well. Yeah, I see the spelling errors, but for English not being your first language, you do very well. I want to encourage you to continue this story. It is so wonderful and I so want to see what happens next... ^_^
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January 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I could beta for you if you\'d like. Just email me and let me know... ^_^