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January 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hi! I\'m glad that u updated...I can\'t wait till Eiri finally meets Shuichi...About the grammar stuff I\'m sure that if u ask someone will help you...if no one accepts the offer i editing your work....i have lots of things to do but i guess i could help u out and help u with the grammar...just email me the chapters and stuff...don\'t worry too much trust me your story is good...its not the quality that it lacks it just needs to be beta read...let me know soon :D
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January 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
no.. i like how u are writing the story... please continue
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January 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
(Ch. 1)
Nice idea, horrible grammar and spelling - you\'ll need to work on that.
Be more descriptive, as well.
But all in all, I like your idea so far and would like to see more.
So until then,
Ja ne~
Nice idea, horrible grammar and spelling - you\'ll need to work on that.
Be more descriptive, as well.
But all in all, I like your idea so far and would like to see more.
So until then,
Ja ne~
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January 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is a very intreasting plot line. I think you should contule it. UPDATE sooon
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January 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
wow! Hurry the hell up with this one man! This story looks kick-ass^-^ so update your story! NOW!
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January 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Whoa...I cannot wait to see the outcome of this ^^;;; Very good! Well written also. I can\'t wait to read more!! Please update soon ;__; Onegai? Well I\'ll review some other time. Bai Bai!! ~ Tsuki
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January 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is really interesting and i like it....there is a problem though...u need a beta reader because the mistakes were getting type of annoying...i suggest u get someone to take care of the spelling and i think it would be much more enjoyable...Please continue soon though :D
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January 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I think this is really good! You should post it on ff.net! Well anyway update soon and do you think you could possibly make it into an MPREG, you will gain more reviews that way, but remember it\'s only a suggestion!!! Well update soon!!!
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January 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is a very clever story and I would very much like to read more of it... hopefully soon ^^. My only itsy bitsy complaint is that like 5-10 words if that were spelled wrong, and I think that also includes gramatical errors, but all in all, very good. Not to bad for your first fan fic, maybe after you finish this fic, I would like to read more of your writing, keep up the good work ^__^!!!