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April 15, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Hey, this is a pretty good story particularly the plot. I'm thinking you should expound more on Mitsui's relationship withy Jin and Sendoh. Also, I like how Mitsui doesn't seem to have any feelings or is oblivious towards Rukawa. Maybe you should lengthen the chapters a bit though, they're kinda short and a bit rushed. And proofread for typos or grammar errors before publishing. Keep writing and improving yourself. I look forward to the next dozen chapters ;)
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September 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
IMO, this fic is an enjoyable fic. :) Do continue writing. I\'m definitely looking forward to the continuation here. It doesn\'t matter whether the characters are slightly ooc because this IS a fanfiction after all. :D
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February 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hello there.
First, I can\'t really tell you what I think about the plot, since you\'ve posted such a short chapter. But I tell you, please continue because there aren\'t many MitRu fics, and they make the hottest couple.
The usual mistake that people do when writing a story is rushing it. Take your time to build up the plot and pay attention to the details.
In the next chapter, please don\'t make them have sex. First you could build a bit of tension and drama, and as the story continues, describe how their relationship develops, etc.
Please try to do a great MitRu fic, because as I said before, there aren\'t many, so make this one worth reading.
It\'s a good thing that your grammar and spelling are good, because there\'s nothing worse than reading bad written stories.
I hope you update soon so readers can give you more detailed reviews, because it\'s hard to do it with so little material.
I really hope that you can please the MitRu fans out there. At least I\'ve been waiting for ages to read a kickass fic about these two.
Good luck.
First, I can\'t really tell you what I think about the plot, since you\'ve posted such a short chapter. But I tell you, please continue because there aren\'t many MitRu fics, and they make the hottest couple.
The usual mistake that people do when writing a story is rushing it. Take your time to build up the plot and pay attention to the details.
In the next chapter, please don\'t make them have sex. First you could build a bit of tension and drama, and as the story continues, describe how their relationship develops, etc.
Please try to do a great MitRu fic, because as I said before, there aren\'t many, so make this one worth reading.
It\'s a good thing that your grammar and spelling are good, because there\'s nothing worse than reading bad written stories.
I hope you update soon so readers can give you more detailed reviews, because it\'s hard to do it with so little material.
I really hope that you can please the MitRu fans out there. At least I\'ve been waiting for ages to read a kickass fic about these two.
Good luck.