rate_review Reviews

Holy god you are talented. This is awesome. Awesome awesome awesome. Sequel dammit.

This story is..... oh my fucking god, this is so awesome. Damn damn damn! *twitches when she can\'t come up with more words* DAMN!!!!





..... I\'m guessing that in the end the child got possessed / taken over by legato?
The joking chapel priest was hilarious, btw. He sounds like a real sweety. It was also a nice touch that the kid was never afraid of \'em or unnerved by them, either....
the bit about \'having friends over when i was supposed to be doing homework\' was fantastic. :D

....... I hope knives is okay though! >_<;;;;

This story is..... oh my fucking god, this is so awesome. Damn damn damn! *twitches when she can\'t come up with more words* DAMN!!!!


..... I\'m guessing that in the end the child got possessed / taken over by legato?
The joking chapel priest was hilarious, btw. He sounds like a real sweety. It was also a nice touch that the kid was never afraid of \'em or unnerved by them, either....
the bit about \'having friends over when i was supposed to be doing homework\' was fantastic. :D

....... I hope knives is okay though! >_<;;;;

Ohhh... You SO need to run with this. I have the sneaky suspicioun that its supposed to be a one-shot, but still. It would be so damn cool if you continued. I enjoyed the ghost referances, and the way you pulled the characters together, in spite of the whole death thing. It makes sense, in a somewhat disjointed way. That was the writing style. It wouldnt be half as surreal if you made it uber clear. Anyway. Im tired. No more thinking for me, it makes me want to convulse, (thinking at 3:30, not your story!) Great job, anyway. *offers a cookie*

Much luv,
Natakamani

Okay. I REALLY like the premise to this story (even though Wolfwood is dead...) but it could use a bit more fleshing-out. I think you\'re trying to go for a mystical/surreal feeling, but there\'s so little there that it ends up being vaguely incoherent. Your style is awesome, though, and the way you portray the kid is really excellently done. I get the feeling he\'s about 9 or 10, is that about right?

My first instinct is to have you write an actual conversation between the kid and Vash, then see where it goes. You have an excellent start, and a REALLY good idea going here. Make it better! ^.^

Wow. I had to read it again to make sure I got it all, and it\'s so.. subtle in the way it gets darker. I\'m not sure what to say. Great work.