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This is absolutely awesome! Loved the way you didn\'t have a name for Xellos\'s human form, and that Xellas took the form a child. Are you going to continue the story?

Amazing good job. You put a lot of work into this and it shows. The only thing I would like to see more of is more descriptions of the people and places so I could really see it in my head. Other than that great job. This could use a sequel :)

That is the best Xelloss-starting-out-as-human fic I\'ve ever read. In fact, I normally hate them. Yours is good however. Well written... even spell-checked. I applaud your efforts. You have a fantastic talent for imagery, but I felt the middle tended to drag. It needs a bit of punching up... More action? Some more self-mutilation?

Thank you for your kind words Gretchen, I truly appreciate them. I had thought to myself that perhaps the middle dragged some as you\'ve said, but I\'m still learning how to use the formatting system for AFF.Net. Once I have it down pat, I\'ll consider revising as you\'ve suggested.