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October 20, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Very good chapter. This has got to be the best Saiyuki fanfiction i\'ve ever read, and I\'ve read alot. Your story is very captivating and I can\'t wait until you write the next chapter. Please write soon cause I enjoy this very much.
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October 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hands down this is THE BEST Goku x Gojyo fanfiction I have ever had the pleasure of reading. I mean, the pacing of the story leading up to the lemon scene is immaculate. Goku and Gojyo are in extreme character, hardly any OOCness. And one thing I was really impressed by was the fact that you mentioned what actually has to happen before two males come together. In most fan fictions it’s just stretch it and go, but in your story you actually broke it down and it seemed most realistic and logical to me. And not only that this story is soooo damn sexy!! The scenes are very arousing and hot and your use of description just enhances the experience. I personally favor this pairing with all my heart and I was very happy to see that someone not only took such a great couple and made a story, but also wrote a breathtaking story at that. This is the ONLY pairing of Saiyuki I like and this fan fiction with no doubt will be etched in my mind as one of my favorite fan fictions!! I hope you update soon I’m very anxious and cant wait for some more of your exquisite writing!!
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October 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
lol, well, some people call me Gynnie....(draGYN-NIE), so it\'s up to you. You can call me anything you want as long as you keep writing >.< *pokes chapters*
~Angel/Gynnie
~Angel/Gynnie
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October 14, 2005 at 12:00 AM
You are so awesome. Your fic is so waffy I love it
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October 9, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I know I haven\'t commented in quite a few chapters, but I\'ve been reading all along.
I\'ve got a bit of an issue with Goku\'s physical reaction to the sex. Firstly, he takes quite a bit of punishment in cannon, getting beat up and knocked around without much recovery time or serious injury. Even if you want to ignore all that and presuppose he\'d have a normal, human reaction, having him be so incapacitated is a bit unrealistic. At least if the gay guys I know are telling the truth. It was almost like he\'d had major surgery or something, it just seemed overdone.
That being said... I love the interactions between the guys. The characterizations are pretty solid, and all the conversations were great to read. I could just picture the outside of the theater, with Gojyo and Hakkai leaning against it. And Sanzo and Gojyo\'s little fight was *perfect*. One thing I really like is that you show Hakkai\'s um, ruthlessness I suppose would be one word for it. He\'s very strong and it\'s easy to miss that. You don\'t. And Sanzo \'almost going after\' the two when they got loud somehow... fits.
As to the pairings... it\'s hard to say. I\'m pretty much a die-hard Hakkai/Gojyo fan, but conversely I\'m very fond of Gojyo/Sanzo as well. And while I can see Goku having sex with other people, I just can\'t see him making anyone more important than Sanzo in his life. Honestly, go ahead and toss all of \'em in a big pile and let them sort it out amongst themselves. ::grin::
I\'ve got a bit of an issue with Goku\'s physical reaction to the sex. Firstly, he takes quite a bit of punishment in cannon, getting beat up and knocked around without much recovery time or serious injury. Even if you want to ignore all that and presuppose he\'d have a normal, human reaction, having him be so incapacitated is a bit unrealistic. At least if the gay guys I know are telling the truth. It was almost like he\'d had major surgery or something, it just seemed overdone.
That being said... I love the interactions between the guys. The characterizations are pretty solid, and all the conversations were great to read. I could just picture the outside of the theater, with Gojyo and Hakkai leaning against it. And Sanzo and Gojyo\'s little fight was *perfect*. One thing I really like is that you show Hakkai\'s um, ruthlessness I suppose would be one word for it. He\'s very strong and it\'s easy to miss that. You don\'t. And Sanzo \'almost going after\' the two when they got loud somehow... fits.
As to the pairings... it\'s hard to say. I\'m pretty much a die-hard Hakkai/Gojyo fan, but conversely I\'m very fond of Gojyo/Sanzo as well. And while I can see Goku having sex with other people, I just can\'t see him making anyone more important than Sanzo in his life. Honestly, go ahead and toss all of \'em in a big pile and let them sort it out amongst themselves. ::grin::
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October 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
You write an absolutely lovely Gojyo and a believably deep Goku, I\'m happy to recall it anew with every following chapter. Ganbatte =)
PS. *laughs**shakes fist* Hakkai, you big lying jerk. \"Aw, I\'m so fsking helpful I just can\'t stop and, yes, yes, what is that Sanzo says, too.\" A rose by any other name, honestly. Sanzo, you too, but that\'s just you being IC. When will you both grow up and out of it? XP
PS. *laughs**shakes fist* Hakkai, you big lying jerk. \"Aw, I\'m so fsking helpful I just can\'t stop and, yes, yes, what is that Sanzo says, too.\" A rose by any other name, honestly. Sanzo, you too, but that\'s just you being IC. When will you both grow up and out of it? XP
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October 8, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I did indeed like this chapter!
It makes me want to know more about what was going on in the town and such. Are you going to elaborate on that in the next chapter? I hope so, sounds interesting. :D
But anyway, another good chapter. Once more I returned to the fic and saw you had updated. I did a little happy-dance, and then read it. It made my crappy day a happy day. Sank you!
I can\'t wait till the next chapter, as always. Keep up teh awesome-ful work.
It makes me want to know more about what was going on in the town and such. Are you going to elaborate on that in the next chapter? I hope so, sounds interesting. :D
But anyway, another good chapter. Once more I returned to the fic and saw you had updated. I did a little happy-dance, and then read it. It made my crappy day a happy day. Sank you!
I can\'t wait till the next chapter, as always. Keep up teh awesome-ful work.
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October 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
What\'s this about changing the pairings?! I love the main pairing of this fic! It\'s so unusual to see Goku paired with anyone but Sanzo, that was most of the attraction in the first place. Of course, past the pairing, there is so much more to this story.
This is truly one of the most realistically portrayed, well composed pieces of fiction I\'ve read. Sanzo/Goku is my OTP in this fandom, but you made me fall so hard for this couple that I wish more people would write it. The Sanzo/Hakkai squiks me a little, because while I like seeing my favourite character paired off with just about anybody, I hate seeing the other half of my OTP with anyone else. In the G Wing fandom, I love any 02 pairing, but try to make me read Heero with anyone but Duo and I\'d spit in your face. In this case, I\'m jealous on Goku\'s behalf.
Your Goujo is one of only two I\'ve read that really made me care about him (the other being the beautiful \"When I Tell Him\"). He\'s so considerate, and the way his confident, sleazy shell covers his truly thoughtful and self- depreciating nature is something that you\'ve picked up on from the anime and nurtured into something that makes the reader empathise with his character in a way that\'s seldom found. If this Goujo, who\'s so considerate in the way that he treats Goku- as if he\'s something precious- if this Goujo betrays Goku by going off with Hakkai after what they\'ve built together, I\'d lose all faith in him.
I love the tenderness between them, and I love the way Goujo sees Goku. And I don\'t believe that there isn\'t some degree of love between them. It\'s obvious that Sanzo wants his little monkey-king all to himself, and I like thta that aspect is in this story; it makes it much more multi-dimentional, and gives it depth, but these two have fallen too far and too deep for them to be torn apart for reason of conventional pairings.
As to your other suggestion, anything more than two people in a pairing is hot as hell for a PWP, but it\'s my honest opinion that they just don\'t work relationship-wise. Someone\'s bound to love one more than another, and to sleep with anyone other than that is being unfaithful. They\'re better than that, and your fic would lose that wonderful realism if you went in that dircetion.
And before I can shut myself up, I have to congratulate you on the amazing, fantabulous, stupendous, without equal lemon that you wrote last chapter. That was, without a doubt, the most well executed sex scene I have ever had the pleasure to read. Your attention to detail and use of realistic procedures was something I only wish more people would use. In fact, everyone that has ever written a yaoi lemon without the use of lubricant should be made to read this in order to understand the true mechanics of anal sex. And you continued on into the next chapter! Actual pain after first time ANAL sex.
It\'s nice to see someone with talent AND attention to detail. Hope to see more chapters soon!
This is truly one of the most realistically portrayed, well composed pieces of fiction I\'ve read. Sanzo/Goku is my OTP in this fandom, but you made me fall so hard for this couple that I wish more people would write it. The Sanzo/Hakkai squiks me a little, because while I like seeing my favourite character paired off with just about anybody, I hate seeing the other half of my OTP with anyone else. In the G Wing fandom, I love any 02 pairing, but try to make me read Heero with anyone but Duo and I\'d spit in your face. In this case, I\'m jealous on Goku\'s behalf.
Your Goujo is one of only two I\'ve read that really made me care about him (the other being the beautiful \"When I Tell Him\"). He\'s so considerate, and the way his confident, sleazy shell covers his truly thoughtful and self- depreciating nature is something that you\'ve picked up on from the anime and nurtured into something that makes the reader empathise with his character in a way that\'s seldom found. If this Goujo, who\'s so considerate in the way that he treats Goku- as if he\'s something precious- if this Goujo betrays Goku by going off with Hakkai after what they\'ve built together, I\'d lose all faith in him.
I love the tenderness between them, and I love the way Goujo sees Goku. And I don\'t believe that there isn\'t some degree of love between them. It\'s obvious that Sanzo wants his little monkey-king all to himself, and I like thta that aspect is in this story; it makes it much more multi-dimentional, and gives it depth, but these two have fallen too far and too deep for them to be torn apart for reason of conventional pairings.
As to your other suggestion, anything more than two people in a pairing is hot as hell for a PWP, but it\'s my honest opinion that they just don\'t work relationship-wise. Someone\'s bound to love one more than another, and to sleep with anyone other than that is being unfaithful. They\'re better than that, and your fic would lose that wonderful realism if you went in that dircetion.
And before I can shut myself up, I have to congratulate you on the amazing, fantabulous, stupendous, without equal lemon that you wrote last chapter. That was, without a doubt, the most well executed sex scene I have ever had the pleasure to read. Your attention to detail and use of realistic procedures was something I only wish more people would use. In fact, everyone that has ever written a yaoi lemon without the use of lubricant should be made to read this in order to understand the true mechanics of anal sex. And you continued on into the next chapter! Actual pain after first time ANAL sex.
It\'s nice to see someone with talent AND attention to detail. Hope to see more chapters soon!
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October 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I read all of this in one shot well to end of chapter 5 but I had no choice to stop because I\'m shifting house and hadn\'t packed a thing -.-; but I\'ve saved a copy to my compy cause face I\'m gunna keep reading... you got me hooked... *nods* plus Gojyo is soooo my favorite character... Keep it up and I look forward to reading more when I get the chance
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October 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
That was kinda weird...I mean Hakkai and Sonzo not a couple...Not cool at all!!! They so need to be one...Not just fuck buddies...