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PLEASE!!! This is torture!!! Update, or I\'ll write the other reviews for ya!

Aw, man. See? I told ya I\'d review. This story could use a little more description to help everything smooth more fluidly, but besides that, it\'s pretty good!

Oh, the only other thing that you need to work on is character development. We all know that Seras wants Integra for herself and that Alucard wants Daphne, but explore the depths of their actions and mind. Think like they do, put yourself into their situation and write down how you think they would feel. It wil help your story immensly.

Okay, now you have your five reviews, and I hope that they were meaningful. Now, PLEASE POST!!! This is the most I have ever reviewed in one day. You\'ve broken the record. Congrats. -_- Now please, (see, I\'m bowing) upload the next chapter! You now have a loyal fan that will give you many reviews for each chapter you place. One review for each one that you post. So, keep at it! Ja ne!

I wrote a full review of this fic here, at Hellsing Reviews: http://www.livejournal.com/community/hellsingreviews/38791.html