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for Hiko\'s Water Sprite

by Marlingrl

schedule February 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
DAMN!!!!!!!!!!!!! You have talents. I love these chapters so much! :) Can't wait to read your next one. She is luck. Hiko is one hot 43 year old. You should write chapter where she comes vist him in his house.
schedule March 18, 2007 at 12:00 AM
*broken brain* Hiko sexy...

*coughs* Anyway, i loved the whole thing... if you choose to continue it i'm sooooo for it but if not what's here is just fine :D Well done and I mean it! ^^
person me
schedule January 20, 2006 at 12:00 AM
wow i absolutley love this ya know theres not enough hiko stories out there i realy hope this continues and i wonder if there will be a plot i hope i cant wait for your next update
person Kanzen ne Tsuki
schedule October 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ahhhh... I love this naughty story. You should have so many more reviews on it.
So, so many more.
It\'s beautiful... utterly, and completely beautiful.

Tsuki-san
person shuiede
schedule July 29, 2005 at 12:00 AM
hey! what happened? kindly please update this one?
person shuiede
schedule May 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
your imagination is a very, very naughty one! This is so good! Keep it up!
person Kanzen ne Tsuki
schedule May 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is turning into a wonderful love story. I hope you continue it. The last two chapters of \'Control\' were good as well. You are blossoming into a beautiful erotica author. Keep up the good work. You can only get better from here.

Tuski-san

p.s. Thank you for what you said in my reviews. It means more than you can imagine. god bless my friend.
schedule April 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Enjoyed? most asuredly. You must finish and then continue.

Tsuki-san
person shuiede
schedule April 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This is good! It reminds me of some of my fave historical novels. I like it so much! Please continue this one.
person Lin
schedule March 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
That was........yummy! I didn\'t know you wrote. Shows how long it\'s been since
I viewed the lists. Must read more of this woman\'s
work. And you... you must write another chapter to this ... ahem... one shot.

One word of advice... sentence variation: Your first paragraph ended with 4
sentences, all beginning with \'ing words, and then the next paragraph began
with one. Only someone who is used to critiquing manuscripts would really
notice, and I am a member of two professional writting groups... hence, I noticed.
:P A few other extraneous words and double word useage (just proof read a
little more), nothing major. The piece was Exemplary.

Well Done... I\'ll be watching you, young one. I think this needs to go on my
websight. That I do.... :)

Tsuki-san

Off to find something else of yours.....

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