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for Blue on Blue

by chani

person Cupnjava c[~]~~~*sip*
schedule March 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I think this was superbly written and wonderfully entertaining. You made me laugh, wince and giggle with glee. You found a great mix of smugness, humor and sexiness in these guys. I love the little “tweak” with the Great Kannon as far as the recipe goes -- that was grand. I was nodding at my screen thinking, “Yep, yep, that’s totally her.”

I really like how you portrayed the relationship dynamic between our favorite Marshal and our favorite General. Fics like this make me wonder which I like more Kenren and Tenpou or Gojyo and Hakkai.

I especially like how you showed their working relationship, hinted at a solid Tenpou seme and then teased us with Kenren seme. Loved THAT!

Even if you removed the sexiness and the lemony goodness, this fic is wonderfully entertaining. You weave a good story web.

I have search through this to find a point of critique, but I can’t find one. Maybe it is my headache. I’ll see if I can come up with something for ya.

I love your style. I think the spacing and timing was grand. I like the Kenren POV and the whole thing was just wonderful.

You should write more -- a lot more.

Cupnjava c[~]~~~*sip*

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