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This is really good. It really cracked me up, the whole hermaphrodite thing. Where did you get that idea. Anyway it's awesome.

Dun dun dun. I'm only on the second chapter but I really like this, I like you're writing style (probably because it's similar ;P) I also really really really like how you showed the creepy neighbor's PoV. That really added to the effect.

I finished it and I'm here to review again, like I promised. ^^ I'd would like to apologize for my previous rant. I siezed to keep in mind that this is fan FICTION; sorry for going all techinical on you! :P Anyway. I absolutley loved it. I'm going to go check out the sequel right now. I'm sure it'll be just as great, if not even better!
<3 Kelly =)

I'm sorry I haven't read this whole fic yet so I might be a little biased, but I just got to ch. 14. If Shuichi were a hermaphadiote(sp) then he could only get pregnant through artificial insemenation, because if they are having anal sex there is no way that the semen could reach all of the female parts. Also if you meant to imply he was bleeding from his rear, that would be impossible because the instestines are in no way connected to the uterus. I'm sorry for that little rant, but I am enjoying this fic so far but that part just... threw me off. I'd also like to suggest that you consider getting your future fics beta'd. I think that you are an excellent writer and have a creative mind, it just kinda sucks to see misspellings and typos here in there. Nice job so far, I'll review again when I complet this fic. Soyonara! =)

Hi. Just wanted to say two things about this. #1 - It was a really great story and I loved almost the whole thing. 'Almost' leads me to #2 - Why in the Hell did you keep calling Shuichi Shu-han?? Shu-"HAN"? WTF? Shu-CHAN I could understand but Shu-han made no sense at all. The first time I saw that in here I thought it was just a typo but it kept showing up. It got really irritating seeing this over and over again. For me, it really detracted a lot from the story - too distracting. Other than this, shall we say 'misspelling', the story was very compelling and well written.
Koneko

wow.this is one of the best stories i've ever read.i read it all in one day and it was really beautiful.hope you would write a sequel(pretty please?)!!=)

Chpt 27 et al: Ok, so I stuck with the story despite my initial reaction to chpt 14, and hey it couldn\'t have been that bad since its 3AM and I stayed up to finish it despite work in the morning. I think you handled the mpreg aspects better than a lot of people have, and you didn\'t go overboard on his \"symptoms\"which I really appreciate! I think you are a good writer, but did you really mean crocodile tears every time you used it? Overall though, it was very entertaining and a I was glad that you didn\'t fall into the memory loss trap or too much angst, it was cool to see a happy ending. I think you could do some funny one shots/sequel stuff with twins! Good luck in school!

CHpt 14: ok.. What the fuck are you doing?! I had to stop at the h?! part! WTF?!?!?! I have patiently went alone with this story, but this is just too much I had to review! Argh! why do so many stories have to go back to that?! this was a cool evil fan story, why did you do this?! *sighs in resignation and returns to story*...

How did Shuichi give birth like this??? I mean, does he have a vagina???? And how could Eiri not notice it if that\'s the case. Ok, he was a hermaprodite...but come on! If he had a vagina Eiri would have to notice, right?? Or the babies came out of his anus???
The beginning was pretty good, all the angst and crazyness of Rinjin, but the ending was totally absurd.
It seemed to me that you wanted to end this story no matter what and you rushed the end without caring for any logic.
What a pity.

That was SO good! I\'m so sad its over, but at the same time I\'m happy its complete. I hope you have a good time with your other story and maybe make a sequel to this one.........