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March 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
HI!!!!!!!!!
wow tow Chapters in one day i love this i hope you up-dated soon
i have to go bye bye
wow tow Chapters in one day i love this i hope you up-dated soon
i have to go bye bye
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March 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
OH MY GOD! that was soooooooo cooooool! I love it loveitloveitloveit!!!!! well hurryhurryhurryhurry and update soooooooooooooon!!!!!!!! this is great! greatawsomecoolsweetGREAT!
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March 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Very good! That was a really hot scene between Shuichi and Yuki! i\'m wandering what\'ll happen next.
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March 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Nice story, I really like it.
One question. They are Japanese? So why they are talking in English? I suppose they are talking in English because when they say some word in Japanese you mark it - \'koibito\', not \'lover\' so when they say \'lover\' it\'s in English, right?
And if Shu is 28 shouldn\'t Yuki be 30 if he is two years older?
One question. They are Japanese? So why they are talking in English? I suppose they are talking in English because when they say some word in Japanese you mark it - \'koibito\', not \'lover\' so when they say \'lover\' it\'s in English, right?
And if Shu is 28 shouldn\'t Yuki be 30 if he is two years older?
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March 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
HI!!!!!!!
yes yes yes yes yes!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
you up-dated the fic i am happy that yuki is not being cold to shuichi but i
dont like the ages they have but it\'s okay with love zafiro
PS\" i hope you up-dated soon
yes yes yes yes yes!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
you up-dated the fic i am happy that yuki is not being cold to shuichi but i
dont like the ages they have but it\'s okay with love zafiro
PS\" i hope you up-dated soon
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March 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Heh. You\'re welcome. ^^ I only review if I really like something, I\'m somewhat or a lurker, you see. Right! This chapter. I just, wow, adored the dream that Shuichi was having, and his reaction after it. Smacking Eiri just made me sniggle in delight.
Yuki tackling Shuichi to the floor made me laugh. I have a habbit of laughing at serious scenes. ^^; I see you\'ve changed Shuichi\'s hair colour. *sobs and mourns the loss* s\'long as it isn\'t always brought up, I\'m happy. What can I say? I adore his pink hair... and yeah, I know he\'s more \"mature\" now, but dude... pink hair.
Shuichi saying sorry over and over and over again just made me coo, God bless him. The sex secne too - very yum - and this chapter really showed how Yuki has changed too - which is good. I\'d rather be shown something, rather than be told it.
The irony at the end of this chapter wasn\'t lost on me. You\'ve got that freaky dude calling Yuki a pervert, when it\'s he himself who is the -true- pervert. Dramatic irony, gotta love it. Also, I thought it was smirk worthy how he could hear Yuki and Shuichi screwing, that was just a perfect little plot point, fablous enough to make me squeal.
Just an idea/suggestion... drop the \"Shuichi\'s Dream/Shuichi\'s P.O.V\" tags. Besides the fact that it\'s slightly patronising for the reader, it\'s also fun trying to work out what\'s going on, without being already force-fed the answer. I\'m not trying to be insulting, it\'s just a suggestion. Ignore it if you want, makes no difference to me, as I\'m still enjoying this story.
Anyway, you updated in a rather nice timespan, so I was over-joyed. I can\'t, however, wait until you update again. I look forward to it; I\'m already wiggling on my chair.
--Pickles.
Yuki tackling Shuichi to the floor made me laugh. I have a habbit of laughing at serious scenes. ^^; I see you\'ve changed Shuichi\'s hair colour. *sobs and mourns the loss* s\'long as it isn\'t always brought up, I\'m happy. What can I say? I adore his pink hair... and yeah, I know he\'s more \"mature\" now, but dude... pink hair.
Shuichi saying sorry over and over and over again just made me coo, God bless him. The sex secne too - very yum - and this chapter really showed how Yuki has changed too - which is good. I\'d rather be shown something, rather than be told it.
The irony at the end of this chapter wasn\'t lost on me. You\'ve got that freaky dude calling Yuki a pervert, when it\'s he himself who is the -true- pervert. Dramatic irony, gotta love it. Also, I thought it was smirk worthy how he could hear Yuki and Shuichi screwing, that was just a perfect little plot point, fablous enough to make me squeal.
Just an idea/suggestion... drop the \"Shuichi\'s Dream/Shuichi\'s P.O.V\" tags. Besides the fact that it\'s slightly patronising for the reader, it\'s also fun trying to work out what\'s going on, without being already force-fed the answer. I\'m not trying to be insulting, it\'s just a suggestion. Ignore it if you want, makes no difference to me, as I\'m still enjoying this story.
Anyway, you updated in a rather nice timespan, so I was over-joyed. I can\'t, however, wait until you update again. I look forward to it; I\'m already wiggling on my chair.
--Pickles.
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March 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Suspense... is... killing.... Love it so far!
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March 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ooooo.... ^_^ Please update soon! i can\'t wait to see what will happen next!
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March 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Noooo~! Tis a cliffhanger~!
Erhem,sorry for that. ^_^;;
Well,I have to say that this story\'s plot is interesting...yes,definitely interesting. *grins*
But you can try to make the chapters more descriptive and longer yah? (Definitely longer chappies!)
Oh,Yasashii Rinjin sounds hot by the way. ^ ^ Hehe.. Can we expect any slash scenes of this guy with Shuichi? I hope yes.Jealous!Possesive!Yuki is nice and it\'ll also be fun to add in a little competition for Shuichi\'s favour.Especially sneaky/conniving competition that to me sounds like it has Yasahii Rinjin\'s name plastered all over.Ok,I\'ll stop hallucinating right now.After all,your the one running the show. ^ ^;
Once again,Yasashii Rinjin really sounds like an interesting chara. Polite ppl with a creepy/sadistic twist to them are always my cuppa tea. *coughakabenecoughcoughfujicough* Anywayz,hope you update soon.(Veeeery soon.) Don\'t leave me dangling like this!
Erhem,sorry for that. ^_^;;
Well,I have to say that this story\'s plot is interesting...yes,definitely interesting. *grins*
But you can try to make the chapters more descriptive and longer yah? (Definitely longer chappies!)
Oh,Yasashii Rinjin sounds hot by the way. ^ ^ Hehe.. Can we expect any slash scenes of this guy with Shuichi? I hope yes.Jealous!Possesive!Yuki is nice and it\'ll also be fun to add in a little competition for Shuichi\'s favour.Especially sneaky/conniving competition that to me sounds like it has Yasahii Rinjin\'s name plastered all over.Ok,I\'ll stop hallucinating right now.After all,your the one running the show. ^ ^;
Once again,Yasashii Rinjin really sounds like an interesting chara. Polite ppl with a creepy/sadistic twist to them are always my cuppa tea. *coughakabenecoughcoughfujicough* Anywayz,hope you update soon.(Veeeery soon.) Don\'t leave me dangling like this!
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March 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Noooo~! Tis a cliffhanger~!
Erhem,sorry for that. ^_^;;
Well,I have to say that this story\'s plot is interesting...yes,definitely interesting. *grins*
But you can try to make the chapters more descriptive and longer yah? (Definitely longer chappies!)
Oh,Yasashii Rinjin sounds hot by the way. ^ ^ Hehe.. Can we expect any slash scenes of this guy with Shuichi? I hope yes.Jealous!Possesive!Yuki is nice and it\'ll also be fun to add in a little competition for Shuichi\'s favour.Especially sneaky/conniving competition that to me sounds like it has Yasahii Rinjin\'s name plastered all over.Ok,I\'ll stop hallucinating right now.After all,your the one running the show. ^ ^;
Once again,Yasashii Rinjin really sounds like an interesting chara. Polite ppl with a creepy/sadistic twist to them are always my cuppa tea. *coughakabanecoughcoughfujicough* Anywayz,hope you update soon.(Veeeery soon.) Don\'t leave me dangling like this!
Erhem,sorry for that. ^_^;;
Well,I have to say that this story\'s plot is interesting...yes,definitely interesting. *grins*
But you can try to make the chapters more descriptive and longer yah? (Definitely longer chappies!)
Oh,Yasashii Rinjin sounds hot by the way. ^ ^ Hehe.. Can we expect any slash scenes of this guy with Shuichi? I hope yes.Jealous!Possesive!Yuki is nice and it\'ll also be fun to add in a little competition for Shuichi\'s favour.Especially sneaky/conniving competition that to me sounds like it has Yasahii Rinjin\'s name plastered all over.Ok,I\'ll stop hallucinating right now.After all,your the one running the show. ^ ^;
Once again,Yasashii Rinjin really sounds like an interesting chara. Polite ppl with a creepy/sadistic twist to them are always my cuppa tea. *coughakabanecoughcoughfujicough* Anywayz,hope you update soon.(Veeeery soon.) Don\'t leave me dangling like this!