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I absolutly love this story! I do hope you continue it!

Wow. I really liked this series. Especially because the chapters were long!!! It isn't like all the ones that are close to four paragraphs and get quite boring after the first chapter. I believe that the reason that reviews are so few and far between is because DK is not one of the most well known mangas. I love that! This is my all time favorite series and the only one I will ever dole out my hard earned cash for at the bookstore. I am especially pleased with the originality of this fic. Fan Fictions are normally pretty hard to get any thing that is original in them, but although integrating a new character is not new, you did a wonderful job at making your Pegasus as unique as possible. I am also pleased that you use references to the actual books. So few fic writers seem to do that. I must admit that at first I thought that you had put Maximillion Pegasus forom Yugi-oh into the mix and that nearly made me frown on it, but as soon as I aquiested with the notion "do not judge a book by its cover" I discovered that he was really an original being. Bravo. I apologize if I said this rather bluntly. You must have gotten this somewhere in your other reviews. I would have written you a nice long review like this like say, six months ago, but technology is the root of all stress and my Gad dammned computer would not let me e-mails. None of my family could figure what the Hell was wrong with it( we didn't want to call the stupid repairman) and it fixed itself all on its own. Ironic is life no? I suppose since you said that cricism is alright, I could give you a few pointers. (some people are strange and interperet the mildest of comments as flames. Oversensitve bastards) Although I love your rich vocabulary, the useage of titles such as a name or he, him ,her, ect. is not quite like it should be. This is particularly noticable when Ruwalk is mourning Alfeegi. He uses the White Dragon Officer's name too much when he can easily replace it with pronouns without confusing the reader. I believe that that was the only major flaw in the grammer portion I could decipher, so onto the characters. I will say nothing about Pegasus because I think he is perfect the way he is, but I will point out a few things about poor Rath. He tells Thatz the problem with Pegasus in chapter 5, I believe, and that is,in fact, ooc for Rath. He says plainly that he never comfides to anybody his problems. Except Cesia that is. I also think you should include the female characters just a little bit more. Keep in mind that at the end of chapter 5 Pegasus is in Lord Nadil's Castle and at this time in the series so is the fortune teller. That seems to me to be all that I have that is worth saying. Once again, please do not get me wrong. I LOOOOVE this Fic. (This is my fav I have read so far. Sssh! Itz a secret) I dearly wish that you have a fun time in Japan. Hasten back! At least one loyal fan is waiting patiently for the next update. In fact, i would be pleased if you could give me a heads up e-mail when you do post it. TigressWhitestripe@msn.com. Thankz a mill and keep it up!

Tigress Whitestripe

I am loving this story. I love pegasus, and how he fits so cleanly into the story. I love how all the caracters are so much like in the book. And I love seeing a side of Kai-stern that you never saw in the manga, because he was barely in it. Anyway, have fun in Japan, write more.

I did except Pegasus to be a Sue or a badly written character.. I\'m so sorry! It\'s actually a well-written story with interesting characters. Looking forward to more, that last chapter was both scary and good.