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May 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I have enjoyed the fic so far and I don\'t hold grudge for the character deaths. I actually thought your cast of protagonists was too large and unweildy to give each member fair treatment. My only real complaint is that the plot seems to jump a bit with no real explaination, like how did Mitani discover where Kaga was being held, how did he penatrate the compound? showing those would have added to the suspense of the fic, I think. Also where did the clones come from? When was the order for cloning given? Some aspects of this secret project are very clear while others are rather vague. Maybe it\'s justnoticable to me because I\'ve read this fic as a whole rather than in parts.
Here\'s a thought I had while reading. I think if the childern if united could with strategy and tactics gain the aid of the adult Bionics, who appear to still be resistant, and combat the covert project. I think, the children themselves would need to work slowly and secretly to avoid capture, but Mitani has shown how easily the can evade and even penetrate their enemies forces, not mention how much more gifted the children seem to be. let\'s face it these Bionics were designed to be superior if united properly they could easily over come the humans.
Here\'s a thought I had while reading. I think if the childern if united could with strategy and tactics gain the aid of the adult Bionics, who appear to still be resistant, and combat the covert project. I think, the children themselves would need to work slowly and secretly to avoid capture, but Mitani has shown how easily the can evade and even penetrate their enemies forces, not mention how much more gifted the children seem to be. let\'s face it these Bionics were designed to be superior if united properly they could easily over come the humans.
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May 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Thx, exams went well... um, except for chemistry, but... whatever.
Ogata is such a cutey! *hugs him* I\'m so happy he had an appearance... he doesn\'t seem all that evil - he\'s just doing his job. He wouldn\'t stop plaing go if you told him the game hurt the go stones, right? Oh well, I just like him, his cool attitude, his cold glares... everything! ^^x
Right, no Akira and HIkaru for me. ^^x And all the others suffer (which I should find okay since I\'m a fangirl)... I gave up on remembering all the short cuts. So thx for adding the expaination to every chapter!
All in all - short but great! ^_^x
*waits for next chapter*
~Horizont
Ogata is such a cutey! *hugs him* I\'m so happy he had an appearance... he doesn\'t seem all that evil - he\'s just doing his job. He wouldn\'t stop plaing go if you told him the game hurt the go stones, right? Oh well, I just like him, his cool attitude, his cold glares... everything! ^^x
Right, no Akira and HIkaru for me. ^^x And all the others suffer (which I should find okay since I\'m a fangirl)... I gave up on remembering all the short cuts. So thx for adding the expaination to every chapter!
All in all - short but great! ^_^x
*waits for next chapter*
~Horizont
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May 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hey there, thy for yet another chapter (and even in time for such a special date)! ^_^x
It\'s a pity that Hikaru and Akira only showed up a little in this part (I like them both, they\'re just too cute!), and I really hope that Isumi and Waya will find each other again...
Congratulations on finishing your finals, my last exam is on Wednesday... oh well. Which is why I\'m gonna study now.
I\'m looking forward to the next chapter - these boys need to stop hiding some da, one way or another.
Ciao!
~Horizont
It\'s a pity that Hikaru and Akira only showed up a little in this part (I like them both, they\'re just too cute!), and I really hope that Isumi and Waya will find each other again...
Congratulations on finishing your finals, my last exam is on Wednesday... oh well. Which is why I\'m gonna study now.
I\'m looking forward to the next chapter - these boys need to stop hiding some da, one way or another.
Ciao!
~Horizont
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April 26, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Hey there!
Have you ever read \"HEX\" by Rhiannon Lassiter? I remembered that book when I read the parts about the experiments done with bionics.
Anyway, Hikaru and Akira seem to be lucky, in contrary to Mitani. Poor little one...
Thanks for the ability list, it\'s helpful! ^_^x
Very well, I\'m looking forward to part 5!
~Horizont
Have you ever read \"HEX\" by Rhiannon Lassiter? I remembered that book when I read the parts about the experiments done with bionics.
Anyway, Hikaru and Akira seem to be lucky, in contrary to Mitani. Poor little one...
Thanks for the ability list, it\'s helpful! ^_^x
Very well, I\'m looking forward to part 5!
~Horizont
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April 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Well, this is kind of a big project, so it deserves a goo review I guess.
I usually like AUs, the more extreme they are the better. I\'d say this one is a beautiful Future Fiction work and I loved the idea from the beginning! I wondered how the HnG-characters would fit into this world but it worked out after all. It was a bit hard not to get confused with so many characters each having a past *slightly* different from the show. XD It\'s all right though.
Never mind the american names (John, Marc). After all that reforming stuff it doesn\'t sound too far fetched. You sometimes find traditional names and expressions in our modern world, they blend in and no one notices.
I see you\'ve planned the pairings among the boys - on one hand that nice for the readers who are looking for a certain pairing, but on the other hand I think it might have been nice to leave that for the story developing. Though it does sound logical for the boys to know each other one way or another; guess it works either way.
The describtion of the Bionic Project was a bit hard to follow with all that numbers and letters. ^^;; I hardly remember all the traits, but I think I\'ll do when I read the letters later on.
...I wanted this to be longer, but I got that exam coming up and there\'s some studying to do (*kicks German book*). I\'m looking forward to the next parts! Oh and: I know you said this would focus on the younger boys from HnG, but is there any chance that Ogata might have an appearance? He\'s my favorite! ^^x
Thx for writing this wonderful story! ^_^x
~Horizont
I usually like AUs, the more extreme they are the better. I\'d say this one is a beautiful Future Fiction work and I loved the idea from the beginning! I wondered how the HnG-characters would fit into this world but it worked out after all. It was a bit hard not to get confused with so many characters each having a past *slightly* different from the show. XD It\'s all right though.
Never mind the american names (John, Marc). After all that reforming stuff it doesn\'t sound too far fetched. You sometimes find traditional names and expressions in our modern world, they blend in and no one notices.
I see you\'ve planned the pairings among the boys - on one hand that nice for the readers who are looking for a certain pairing, but on the other hand I think it might have been nice to leave that for the story developing. Though it does sound logical for the boys to know each other one way or another; guess it works either way.
The describtion of the Bionic Project was a bit hard to follow with all that numbers and letters. ^^;; I hardly remember all the traits, but I think I\'ll do when I read the letters later on.
...I wanted this to be longer, but I got that exam coming up and there\'s some studying to do (*kicks German book*). I\'m looking forward to the next parts! Oh and: I know you said this would focus on the younger boys from HnG, but is there any chance that Ogata might have an appearance? He\'s my favorite! ^^x
Thx for writing this wonderful story! ^_^x
~Horizont