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December 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Your spelling and grammar were so bad I gave up trying to read this story after a paragraph. Is English not your first language?
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January 31, 2006 at 12:00 AM
.......Ummmm....kay.....wow....well, that was a huge waste of time. Your grammar and spelling are horrible and OC fics suck anyway. Sorry, but due to lack of a discernable plot, I rate your fic as crap and I'll ask you never to disgrace the BASTARD!! series with your drivel again.
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January 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Constructive criticism is very much needed for this fanfiction. I have to say that I didn't get through the first paragraph before I found quite a few "problems" with this story that could use a bit of fixing.
1. Self-insertion fics are very much looked over and ignored; I would suggest creating a character of your own, without using yourself in any fashion, to make this story a little more interesting to readers.
2. Spelling, grammar, and punction -- correctly used -- is always a good sign that the story might be of decent origin; I can fully understand that perhaps you may not have very good grammar skills, but finding a person who does that can proof-read your works is always a simple task. Asking a friend that you are confortable with, or even asking somebody on AFF.net is a good start.
3. Touching more on number two: Learning to spell titles and names correctly is the best start you can get; it's as easy as looking on the boxes of the DVDs or VHS tapes to find the correct spellings.
4. If you feel that writing a fanfiction with the above guidelines is a daunting task (which we all feel intimidated by it, I'm sure), there is always the option of writing in a challenge for other writers; posting a challenge with detailed specifications is a great way to find inspiration or to spawn new ideas for other writers, and it works to your advantage: you get to see your fanfiction idea portrayed in somebody's else's eyes, and it gives others writers the chance to work within specified boundries.
Please, don't take this as a flame, because it isn't; every person in fanfiction deserves to hear constructive criticism for their works, and it always helps to form better fanfiction writers in a world where good fanfiction is rare. Take my advice into consideration, dust yourself off, and try again. I'll be checking up on you!
1. Self-insertion fics are very much looked over and ignored; I would suggest creating a character of your own, without using yourself in any fashion, to make this story a little more interesting to readers.
2. Spelling, grammar, and punction -- correctly used -- is always a good sign that the story might be of decent origin; I can fully understand that perhaps you may not have very good grammar skills, but finding a person who does that can proof-read your works is always a simple task. Asking a friend that you are confortable with, or even asking somebody on AFF.net is a good start.
3. Touching more on number two: Learning to spell titles and names correctly is the best start you can get; it's as easy as looking on the boxes of the DVDs or VHS tapes to find the correct spellings.
4. If you feel that writing a fanfiction with the above guidelines is a daunting task (which we all feel intimidated by it, I'm sure), there is always the option of writing in a challenge for other writers; posting a challenge with detailed specifications is a great way to find inspiration or to spawn new ideas for other writers, and it works to your advantage: you get to see your fanfiction idea portrayed in somebody's else's eyes, and it gives others writers the chance to work within specified boundries.
Please, don't take this as a flame, because it isn't; every person in fanfiction deserves to hear constructive criticism for their works, and it always helps to form better fanfiction writers in a world where good fanfiction is rare. Take my advice into consideration, dust yourself off, and try again. I'll be checking up on you!