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for Haruka and Michiru Lemon Stories

by angelronin

person hotaru
schedule July 12, 2015 at 12:00 AM
MAKE MORE, MAKE MORE WITH LONGER & MORE LOVE SCENES PLEASE
person Toni
schedule September 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Great! Please continue the story.
person deep serenity
schedule May 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
it\'s not shitty(as above reviewer said) it is just not well written.
1st. you need work on your sentence structure. Your sentences are fragments and end to suddenly or leave out words.

2nd.Even with a pwp, there is be SOME background scene info and talking, I started reading and they were just going at it. Get a beta and keep writing, you can only get better with practice.
person noneya
schedule May 11, 2005 at 12:00 AM
its shitty and stupid

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