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for Hiro Breaks It Down!

by Rhonda

person AbstractConcept
schedule August 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wonderful, absolutely wonderful. The crossover at the end was the perfect way of giving the reader a nod and a wink at the finish. What I wouldn\'t give for a trip to that hotel! I\'ll be reccing this for sure.
person AbstractConcept
schedule August 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
So far I\'m only up to chapter 2, but this is absolutely hysterical! Thanks so much for making me snicker at work. It\'s been a long time since I read something this entertaining--frankly, I think it\'s better than the real Gravitation.
person jarath
schedule July 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
ok damian is so reading this one to you are an awsom auther and I love Miko she is just to cool gotta love anyone who sees all and sees nothing at the same time ^.^
schedule June 4, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I must say this is a very creative story, it kept me amused the way through. I just loved the idea of the end credits! Keep up the good work!

Travis
person Quichi
schedule May 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
you are DAMN cool!! I love the end credits!!! I shall keep an eye out for anything you write from now on
person dragon
schedule May 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
LOVED IT!!!! I laughed, I cried, I had to take a cold shower.... :)
I\'ll be looking for your next fic.
You Rock!
person Anon
schedule May 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Damm girl good story and I love the hotel names! I could have used one like that a few times in my life time. HEHE!! keep writting!!
person Sandi59
schedule May 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Loved this fic! Nothing in this fiction was predictible, you kept me guessing. I love the plot twists. Everyone was kept in character. I enjoyed the Shu/Hiro scenes, they were very touching. The tangent you took Suguru on was cute. I look forward to your next fiction.
person Languish_Dreams
schedule May 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
O.O;

Oh my dear God.

I don\'t think I\'ve laughed out loud that hard in a long LONG time. *L* The entire thing was absolutely brilliant! I don\'t think I\'ve ever read a Gravi fic that was as thought out and well written as this! :D And the inclusion of extra characters was just right, not too much attention paid to be boring, but enough to show the action and consequences going on around everyone. *cackles* Sooo funny! I think I nearly peed my pants when you said the delivery guy changed his name to Ben Affleck. *L* At first I wasn\'t even going to read it, because I\'m such a totally obsessed Shu/Yuki pairing fan it\'s borderline scary...but I gave it a chance and I dare say that I would have loved it all the same even if Shu had decided to stay with Hiro.

The only problem I had was chapter length. My eyes tend to get fuzzy on long chapters and skip around on their own accord, making me lose bits and pieces and forcing me to re-read sentences over and over again. But it\'s a brain problem on my part, not a complaint towards you. *L* It was definitely believable, I could almost see this happening as an episode. *L* You even managed to keep Yuki in character, despite the tears (I can see it happening). The \'Secret Inn\' bit was hilarious; I choked laughing at some of the names and I loved how Shu and Hiro didn\'t just jump straight into the sack, but talked before and after and remained sensible and believable throughout.

Needless to say, if this was posted on fanfiction.net, it would be on my favorites list in a heartbeat. :D I especially loved the epilogue and how Shu and Yuki\'s relationship developed slowly, instead of Yuki doing a complete turn-around like in most fics. Utterly wonderful all together! I hope you do more! :D

I think I\'ve rambled on enough. *L* To put it shortly: I absolutely loved it! ;D

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