rate_review Reviews

Wow, that was hot HOT HOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOTTTTTTTTTTTT! I wonder why more women don't join the Hellsing squad, of course, having a Immortal sexual beast like Alucard there to visit you can either help or hinder the possibility. Still good writing I felt as if I was actually there getting sexed. So descriptive.

Quite fun to read, but I would agree with the above reviewer on the necessity of going over it and checking for missed capitalizations, punctuation, etc. I would recommend Strunk and White\'s \"Elements Of Style\" for any questions on that line. Actually, I just recommend it to everyone generally who writes :)
Other than that, the story was an awful lot of fun. The last line made me laugh out loud :)

Actually, it was quite enjoyable. You did very well in making explicit the fear one would feel with a vampire in close proximity. No matter the fantasy, the reality is never as pleasurable. Well, except in fiction. However, your characterization was rather good. I\'d work on punctuation and dialogue format a bit. The lack of capitals and punctuation made it slightly difficult to make out who was speaking. Characterization and word choice clarified, but I would look for examples of proper dialogue usage to assist. I would read another work of yours. That is the highest praise I can administer.

HEHE!!!!!
Awesome!!!! That story totally portrays Alucard as he is supposed to be!!!!
Plz write more!!!!! Gawd I love that story...... It\'s going in my favourites , right.......... [right click, add to favourites] NOW!!!!