rate_review Reviews

My favorite GP fanfic ever! I love this su-chan! Viva the golden pair! :D

Wow! What an awesome story! And long too! I can\'t believe that it has so few reveiws, though... I guess not many people could finish it. You write amazing sex scenese, and this really made my day. I love watching the relationships develope! I\'s going to read Learning to Land right now!

Wow. Wow. Wow. Just amazing. I don\'t know how it\'s humanly possible for someone to write 71 chapters to one fic, but you have done it. This was an amazing story and I can\'t wait to start Learning to Land. My friend referred this fic to me and I\'m glad she did. Thanks for giving me a great way to waste my time. x3

First off, I would like you to know that that was THE largest fanfiction I have EVER read. One of my own, personal fanfictions is currently 28 chapters long but... damn. 70 chapters... and they weren\'t that short, either! I can only wonder at your word count!

This was my first real, PoT fanfiction. Since I\'m a pervert by nature (lol), I went straight away looking for a NC-17 one. I have never read so many lemons in one space of time, ROFL! There are a lot of firsts for me with this fanfiction! I\'m glad it was the pairings I like - TezuxFuji and OishixEiji. I\'m not a super big fan of switching roles (uke/seme) so much, but to each their own! You portrayed that rather nicely, and it didn\'t bother me as much as it might have.

The sap was a LITTLE strong in some parts (sometimes, I thought that trees have less sap than this story and that my teeth were going to start rotting) but... none the less, there were a lot of parts that made me smile or laugh. All in all, it was a good story and I\'m glad I took the time (a lot of time, actually) to read it. I read it all in a day+ (with the exceptions of going to work, etc).

I\'m excited to read Learning to Land because it has Inukai... muhuhuhuh...

But, seriously... I\'m impressed that you were able to write and finish such a long story. O_o; Woooooah. I\'m more impressed that I (who tends to be rather uppity and attention-deficient) could sit through it, even though it really only emcompassed about a months worth of time for the characters. (I\'m guessing, there).

The only criticism I have is that sometimes, the writing style changes or switches mid-chapter. Was it written by more than one person? If so, GOOD JOB EVERYONE! But... specifically, here\'s what I mean.

Example:

Story will be going on and in this format: \"Oishi felt happy that he was able to make Eiji smile, and they laughed.\" (Just a made up sentence).

Then, suddenly, the next paragraph will shift and it becomes: \"Oishi feels happy that he was able to make Eiji smile, and they were laughing about it.\"

It\'s almost like the POV and the tenses changed... sometimes it through off the rhythm a little, because I couldn\'t understand why it shifted. But, regardless, I read on because it was a good story and good stories are worth even minor, grammatical aggravations!

Again, I like that the characters got together and I loved the beginning, when Oishi first kissed Eiji and was trying to teach him. That was super cute! I\'m also glad that, uh, Tezuka and Fuji\'s relationship straightened out a bit more and they stopped being so dorky! (That\'s meant as a compliment to you, lol!)

SO... (this was a long-ass review)... what I\'m trying to say is... I read every chapter (I\'m sorry, I couldn\'t review every chapter because... well... I was too busy reading it!) I\'m impressed with how much effort seems to have went into this story, and it was great because (I really am a pervert!) I liked having lemons every other chapter - rofl!

Thanks for helping me out with my very first PoT fanfiction and making it a good one... you should totally switch loyalties and come write for Gundam Wing! I\'d support your fanfiction, yo! (...well, if it was 1x2, 3x4, 13x5...) If you ever write a 3x4 fanfic, let me know and I\'ll read it! (...well, if it ends happy because I like happy ends...) (...what\'s with all the if\'s?!)

Thanks! ^__^ You rock!

WOW!!! This story was so amazing!!! ^_^ I loved how it was written, and how you developed each of the relationships, not just getting them all into one big orgy....although there\'s nothing wrong with that...(grins) I can\'t wait to read more so please keep on writting!!! You just made a huge fan! LOL

I read your story, and I really like the plot, characterness and everything, I just really have one pet peeve. There are points, fewer at first but more frequent as it progresses, where you use the present progressive tense. I personally find this tense rather distracting, and prefer it when it is in the past tense. But then again, almost everyone seems to write in the present, so it could be just me. Great plots and everything though! I did enjoy reading it!

nya um...this is my first fic I\'ve read and actually liked at adultfanfiction. Haha....I\'m not even normally one for fanfics, and this wasn\'t originally my fave pairing...but somehow you have made oishi and eiji capture my heart. I\'ve even been able to forget entirely some of my writing pet pieves to read this, becuase the story is very interesting. A lot of stories are just sex, and while you have a lot of citrus going, its very loving emotional, and touching. Wonderful work and I\'ll keep going until the end even if it takes me forever X__x. Kudos.

~Centi

Eto, I think you did a very good job of coming up with a lot of explanations for things that aren\'t made clear in the story so far as i\'ve seen (~138 ep) altho i don\'t know if there are answers that you\'re getting from the manga? which is very far behind.

But it\'s a great back story filler, of why and how, and the characters are very...in character with any situations being explained by the context as to why not. It\' very well written and i\'ve enjoyed reading it a lot. ~blinks~ altho\' i wonder what kind of books Eiji is reading, i know scifi/fantasy anthologies of short stories but...hmm what kind.

Well done characters ~grin~ i like that in a story. It had it\'s sad and dramatic parts but then you\'re dealing with sad events and dramatic characters. I really like that it answers questions...such as Eiji\'s bandage...

wow omgoddess dude, i fucking loved this story!! all these short 2-3 chapter fics and mostly one shots and then i find this treasure with my fav pairing and 71 chapters!! i couldn\'t stop reading it!! i had to force myself to sleep occasionally during the 4 days it took to read!!! i loved it! your writing is excellent(so much so that i completely didn\'t mind the occasional typos and such, which usually drive me nuts but not here lol), and the story, emotions, situations, little idiosyncrasies, and ohhh! just everything was so well done!! especially the interactions between two new couples and how different history baggage can effect a relationship, etc... it\'s so funny cuz despite all that, this story is essentially way more sappy than anything i usually can stand to read, yet it\'s now one of my favorites because the sappy sweetness was *right* like, a lot of stuff between oishi and eiji really reminded me of me and my husband it was amazing! (i laughed at myself for a bit thinking how cutesy we were--still are i guess lol--because that\'s how oishi and eiji were together, cutesy but it was so right! and you didn\'t let it be unrealistically cutesy because they still had drama just like everyone, even me and my hubby, does) anyway, i was on chapter 68 last night and talkin to my girl houseki on yim and telling her how it was almost over and i didn\'t want it to be! she was like \"you\'ve been reading it the last 3 days nonstop and still don\'t want it to be done? wow!\" i\'ve been talking to her and quoting things i loved from it (though not everything cuz she needs to read it for herself, and will once she finally sees the anime :p, but still i quoted waaaay more than i usually do from fics..) ever since i started reading it and i was so gushy i was like begging her to just read a bit about PoT and let me tell her basic character descriptions and such so she knew who was who and basically what was going on, but she didn\'t want to be lost so she still hasn\'t read it and it was like TORTURE to not tell her about everything and gush every single second! seriously!! anyway, so she was giggly over how much i love it and i was like \"yeah, i\'ve been reading it this long, and it\'s 71 ch\'s and i still want more! even though i know after this is the sequel i can read, but i still want more! lol\" so, yeah, anyway, if ya can\'t tell, i love you and this story and hope you write even more in the future!! thank you so much for writing this!! *glomps you*

~lg

I really loved reading this fic...I\'ve never even seen PoT, but I\'ve fallen in love with this fic. lol I like your style of writing; it\'s different. Like the previous reviewer said, it\'s simple (without being *too* simple) but I like it better than some of the other writing styles I\'ve read. This is definitely one of the best fanfics I\'ve come across. It\'s not just meaningless smut, it\'s a really sweet, touching fic. (One of my favorite moments was when Eiji was telling Fuji about learning to fall...one of the many scenes I\'ve read multiple times. ^^;;) I\'m looking forward to reading Learning to Land~ Thanks for a good read!